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the graph below shows information about consumption of spreads from 1989 to 2007. summarise information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant v.1

the graph below shows information about consumption of spreads from 1989 to 2007.
The line graphs illustrate the amount of three spreads that consumers ate between 1981 to 2007. Overall, there was a dramatically change in each category. Both in consumption of butter and margarine, the trends decreased, while that of low fat and reduced spreads had a significant rise. There was a slight increase in the amount of butter that people consumed, from 140 grams to 160 grams over 5-year period. After that, this figure fell considerably to 50 grams in 2007. The figure of consumption of Margarine had a slight increase of 10 grams between 1981 and 1991. Then, after remained stably over 5-year period, this number fell steadily from 100 grams in 1996 to only 40 grams in 2007. In contrast, consumers were prone on low fat and reduced spreads. There was a sharp rise in the figure of that, from only 10 grams in 1996 to just over 80 grams in 2001, though this figure had a slight drop to 70 grams in 2007.
The line graphs illustrate the amount of three spreads that consumers ate
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between 1981 to 2007
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dramatically
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change
in each category. Both in consumption of butter and margarine, the trends decreased, while that of low
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fat
and
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reduced
spreads had a significant rise.

There was a slight increase in the amount of butter that
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people
consumed, from 140
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grams
to 160
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grams
over 5-year period. After that, this
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figure
fell
considerably
to 50
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grams
in 2007.

The
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of consumption of Margarine had a slight increase of 10
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grams
between 1981 and 1991. Then, after remained
stably
over 5-year period, this number fell
steadily
from 100
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grams
in 1996 to
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only
40
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grams
in 2007.
In contrast
, consumers were prone on low
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fat
and
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reduced
spreads. There was a sharp rise in the
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figure
of that, from
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only
10
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grams
in 1996 to
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just
over 80
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grams
in 2001, though this
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figure
had a slight drop to 70
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in 2007.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS academic the graph below shows information about consumption of spreads from 1989 to 2007.

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4 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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