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Task 1: The table shows the amount of money given in aid of technology of developing countries by charities in the US, EU and other countries from 2006 to 2010. v.2

Task 1: The table shows the amount of money given in aid of technology of developing countries by charities in the US, EU and other countries from 2006 to 2010. v. 2
The table illustrates the amount of donations made by the US, UK and other countries in order to support technological development in developing countries between 2006 and 2010. Overall, it is noticeable from the table that there was an upward trend in the amount of money by charities throughout the five-year period. Additionally, the money donated by the US charities was by far highest. The total amount of money given by all charities saw a dramatic increase from 15. 7 billion of US dollars in 2006 to 24. 3 billion in 2009. The number continued to rise sharply to 30 billion dollars in the following year, the highest number recorded in the table. The US charities contributed 9. 7 billion in 2006, half of the total amount of money and the figure then climbed steadily to reach its peak at 22. 7 billion in 2010. At the beginning of the given period, in EU, countries gave charities from 3. 3 billion in 2006 and the aid slowly grew to 3. 1 billion in 2008. The figure then dropped slightly by half a billion to 2. 6 billion in 2009 and in the following year, the money was at a record of 4 billion dollars. Meanwhile, charities in other countries also provided increasing aid. Despite a similar fluctuation to EU charities in the amount given each year, donations went up from $2. 7 billion in 2006 to reach $3. 3 billion in 2010.
The table illustrates the
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amount
of donations made by the US, UK and other
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countries
in order to support technological development in developing
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countries
between 2006 and 2010.

Overall
, it is noticeable from the table that there was an upward trend in the
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amount
of
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money
by
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charities
throughout the five-year period.
Additionally
, the
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money
donated by the US
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charities
was by far highest.

The total
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amount
of
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money
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given
by all
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charities
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saw
a dramatic increase from 15. 7
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billion
of US dollars in 2006 to 24. 3
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billion
in 2009. The number continued to rise
sharply
to 30
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billion
dollars in the following year, the highest number recorded in the table. The US
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charities
contributed 9. 7
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billion
in 2006, half of the total
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amount
of
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money
and the figure then climbed
steadily
to reach its peak at 22. 7
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billion
in 2010.

At the beginning of the
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given
period, in EU,
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countries
gave
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charities
from 3. 3
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billion
in 2006 and the aid
slowly
grew to 3. 1
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billion
in 2008. The figure then dropped
slightly
by half a
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billion
to 2. 6
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billion
in 2009 and in the following year, the
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money
was at a record of 4
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billion
dollars. Meanwhile,
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charities
in other
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countries
also
provided increasing aid. Despite a similar fluctuation to EU
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charities
in the
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amount
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given
each year, donations went up from $2. 7
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billion
in 2006 to reach $3. 3
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billion
in 2010.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic Task 1: The table shows the amount of money given in aid of technology of developing countries by charities in the US, EU and other countries from 2006 to 2010. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
242 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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