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Thr graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emission person in the United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 in 2007. v.1

Thr graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emission person in the United Kingdom Sweden Italy and Portugal between 1967 in 2007. v. 1
The line graph illustrates the average carbon dioxide emission per person in four different countries(the Great Britain, Sweden, Italy and Portugal) over a 40 years of period. Overall, it can be seen that average carbon dioxide emissions per person in Portugal and Italy increased, whereas in United Kingdom and Sweden decreased over the period shown. Looking at the chat in more detail, it is evident that every CO2 emissions in Portugal increased from around 1 metric tonnes in 1967 to around 5 metric tonnes in 2007. Similarly, Italy was started at four metric tonnes in 1967 28 metric tonnes in 2007. Turning to the remaining data sets, it is clear that Sweden showed dramatic change in graph over a given period. In sweden, average CO2 emission per person was 28 pounds in 1967 after that it went up to 18 towns in 1977 then went down to fight tones in 2007. Apart from that, average carbon dioxide released per person in United Kingdom slightly decreases from 10 tonnes in 1967 29 tonnes in 2007, which was the minimal change in whole graph.
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countries(the Great Britain, Sweden, Italy and Portugal) over a 40 years of period.

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in Portugal increased from around 1 metric tonnes in 1967 to around 5 metric tonnes in 2007.
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at four metric tonnes in 1967 28 metric tonnes in 2007.

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in 1967 after that it went up to 18 towns in 1977 then went down to fight tones in 2007. Apart from that,
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