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Task 1: The information below gives details about household income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v.2

Task 1: The information below gives details about household income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v. 2
The bar chart shows total income and how much of the income was spent on household, and the pie chart compares how the expenditure was broken down into 5 categories by an average family in a city of UK in 2010 and 2013. It is clear that significant amount of income was used for food and clothes in both years. We can also see that UK residents spent an insignificant percentages of their household budgets on dairy products. According to the table chart, in 2010, $14000 over $29000 of total income was utilized for buying food and clothes which was accounted for nearly 50 per cent of total earnings. In 2013, the amount of money using for the same figure of 2010 was $15000, which was 10 per cent higher than the last 3 years. Looking at the spending categories pie chart, the majority of income was used for fruits and veggies in 2010 and 2013, with 20% and 35% respectively. Having the largest proportion in 2010, expenditure on meat and fish saw a decline of 10% in 2013, while in contrast, the amount of expenditure went for dairy products rose slightly, which was 20% of the total income. The figure for clothes was dropped from 22 per cent to only 12 per cent after 3 years.
The bar
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chart
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shows
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total
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income
and how much of the
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income
was spent
on household, and the pie
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chart
compares how the expenditure
was broken
down into 5 categories by an average family in a city of UK in 2010 and 2013.

It is
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clear
that significant amount of
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income
was
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used
for food and clothes in both years. We can
also
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see
that UK residents spent an insignificant
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percentages
of their household budgets on dairy products.

According to the table
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chart
, in 2010, $14000 over $29000 of
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total
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income
was utilized
for buying food and clothes which
was accounted
for
nearly
50 per cent of
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total
earnings. In 2013, the amount of money using for the same figure of 2010 was $15000, which was 10 per cent higher than the last 3 years.

Looking at the spending categories pie
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chart
, the majority of
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income
was
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used
for fruits and veggies in 2010 and 2013, with 20% and 35%
respectively
. Having the largest proportion in 2010, expenditure on meat and fish
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saw
a decline of 10% in 2013, while
in contrast
, the amount of expenditure went for dairy products rose
slightly
, which was 20% of the
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total
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income
. The figure for clothes
was dropped
from 22 per cent to
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only
12 per cent after 3 years.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic Task 1: The information below gives details about household income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
217 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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