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The information below gives details about household income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v.2

The information below gives details about household income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v. 2
The table shows the information of revenue of an average family of a city in the UK how they spent on food and clothing in 2 years (2010 and 2013). This essay is to analyze the main feature of the given table. Overall, UK citizens tended to increase their food and clothes spending while their income decreased. In 2010, nearly half of total household income was used in food and clothes ($14, 000). In contrast, the cost for food and clothes grew slightly at $15, 000. In term of the bar chart, the cost on food and drinks in 2010 tied with that in 2013 at 18%. In contrast, there was a downtrend in spending on clothes. In 2010, clothes were the second aspect that UK people spent on. In 22% of the totally money the people earned was for clothes in 2010. This ratio of money was dramatically dropped twice at 12% which accounted for the smallest aspect among things UK households used money for.
The table
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shows
the information of revenue of an average family of a city in the UK how they spent on
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food
and clothing in 2 years (2010 and 2013). This essay is to analyze the main feature of the
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given
table.

Overall
, UK citizens tended to increase their
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food
and
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clothes
spending while their income decreased. In 2010,
nearly
half of total household income was
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used
in
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food
and
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clothes
($14, 000).
In contrast
, the cost for
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food
and
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clothes
grew
slightly
at $15, 000.

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In
term of the bar chart, the cost on
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food
and drinks in 2010 tied with that in 2013 at 18%.
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In
contrast, there was a downtrend in spending on
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clothes
.
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In
2010,
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clothes
were the second aspect that UK
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people
spent on.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
22% of the
totally
money the
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people
earned was for
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clothes
in 2010. This ratio of money was
dramatically
dropped twice at 12% which accounted for the smallest aspect among things UK households
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used
money for.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS academic The information below gives details about household income and spending on food and clothes by an average family in one UK city in 2010 and 2013. v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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