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Some people think that uniform at school is unnecessary and should be banned To what extent do you agree or disagree Give your opinion and examples from your own experience v.2

Some people think that uniform at school is unnecessary and should be banned Give your opinion and examples from your own experience v. 2
Nowadays, what more and more people argue is that it would be better if uniforms were banned. In my point of view, I totally disagree with this for 3 reasons. In the first place, uniforms bring every students equality. Obviously, many rich students can buy expensive and beautiful clothes while some poor pupils can not do. As a result, when both wealthy and poor students wear the same clothes to school, no one feels shy or unconfident. Maybe, this is the main benefit of putting on uniforms to school. Besides, students do not have to worry about what they should wear due to uniforms and the school authorities do not need to be nervous about pupils wearing unsuitable clothes when they go to class. In addition, the uniform serves as an identity proof since uniforms of each school are different. It means that when students wear this kind of clothing, it is easy to recognize which school they belong to. In other words, when students wear uniforms, their behaviour will change considerably because if they do the wrong things, they will be punished heavily by their school authorities. Last but not least, some schools design uniforms which are very fashionable. Thus, most pupils want to study at these schools. It means that uniforms are sometimes the driving force for students to try their best. For instance, Le Hong Phong school' s female uniforms are innovative ao dai so lots of female pupils make all effort to pass the entrance exam to be one of students of the school. This is also an effective way to find the talent for country. To sum up, it is necessary for students to wear uniforms to school because they have these above-mentioned benefits.
Nowadays, what more and more
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argue is that it would be better if
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uniforms
were banned
. In my point of view, I
totally
disagree with this for 3 reasons.

In the
first
place,
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uniforms
bring every
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students
equality.
Obviously
,
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many
rich
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students
can
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buy
expensive and
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beautiful
clothes while
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some
poor
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pupils
can not do.
As a result
, when both wealthy and poor
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students
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wear
the same clothes to
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school
, no one feels shy or unconfident. Maybe, this is the main benefit of putting on
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uniforms
to
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school
.
Besides
,
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students
do not
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have to
worry about what they should
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wear
due to
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uniforms
and the
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school
authorities do not need to be nervous about
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pupils
wearing unsuitable clothes when they go to
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.

In addition
, the
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serves as an identity proof since
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uniforms
of each
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school
are
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different
. It means that when
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students
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wear
this kind of clothing, it is easy to recognize which
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school
they belong to.
In other words
, when
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students
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wear
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uniforms
, their
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behaviour
will
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change
considerably
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because
if they do the
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wrong
things, they will
be punished
heavily
by their
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school
authorities.

Last
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but
not least,
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some
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schools
design
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uniforms
which are
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very
fashionable.
Thus
, most
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pupils
want to study at these
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schools
. It means that
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uniforms
are
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sometimes
the driving force for
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students
to try their best.
For instance
, Le Hong
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are innovative
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ao
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dai
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lots of female
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pupils
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make
all effort to pass the entrance exam to be one of
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students
of the
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school
. This is
also
an effective way to find the talent for country.

To sum up, it is necessary for
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to
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wear
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to
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school
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because
they have these above-mentioned benefits.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS academic Some people think that uniform at school is unnecessary and should be banned Give your opinion and examples from your own experience v. 2

Academic
  American English
5 paragraphs
289 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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