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the line graph below shows the consumption of four kinds of meat in a European Country from 1979 to 2004. v.2

the line graph below shows the consumption of four kinds of meat in a European Country from 1979 to 2004. v. 2
The line graph compares the various types of meat, namely chicken, beef, lamb and fish consumed per week in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Overall, it can be seen that, beef and lamb followed a fairly similar patterns. Both followed a downward trend, however, chicken consumption showed an upward trend. Although chicken initially had a lower rate of consumption as compared to beef and lamb, it exceeded the rest at the end of the period. Fish, on the other hand, had almost no change in its intake. During the start of the period, the grams of beef consumed per week stood at a little above 200, being the highest of that year, followed by lamb and chicken consumption, which was around 60 grams less than that, while that of fish remained the least, at a little above 50. Chicken consumption followed a gradual growth throughout. However, beef consumption on the other hand, despite some fluctuations, saw a steady decline. Subsequently, after 1989, the rising rate of chicken consumption outnumbered it. Hence, it finished a period with a low consumption rate of around 100 grams per person per week, followed by lamb, which stood at a little above 50, and then fish, which remained the least consumed one. Contrary to this, chicken became most preferred form of meat by the year 2004 and accounted for a weekly consumption of over 250 grams by the end of the timeframe.
The line graph compares the various types of meat,
namely
chicken,
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beef
,
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lamb
and fish consumed per week in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that,
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beef
and
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lamb
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followed
a
fairly
similar patterns. Both
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followed
a downward trend,
however
, chicken
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consumption
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showed
an upward trend. Although chicken
initially
had a lower rate of
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consumption
as compared to
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beef
and
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lamb
, it exceeded the rest at the
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end
of the period. Fish,
on the other hand
, had almost no
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change
in its intake.

During the
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start
of the period, the
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grams
of
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beef
consumed per week stood at a
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little
above 200, being the highest of that year,
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followed
by
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lamb
and chicken
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consumption
, which was around 60
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grams
less than that, while that of fish remained the least, at a
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little
above 50.

Chicken
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consumption
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followed
a gradual growth throughout.
However
,
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beef
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consumption
on the other hand
, despite
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some
fluctuations,
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saw
a steady decline.
Subsequently
, after 1989, the rising rate of chicken
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consumption
outnumbered it.
Hence
, it finished a period with a low
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consumption
rate of around 100
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grams
per person per week,
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followed
by
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lamb
, which stood at a
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little
above 50, and then fish, which remained the least consumed one. Contrary to this, chicken became most preferred form of meat by the year 2004 and accounted for a weekly
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consumption
of over 250
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grams
by the
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end
of the timeframe.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic the line graph below shows the consumption of four kinds of meat in a European Country from 1979 to 2004. v. 2

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4 paragraphs
239 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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