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The number of subscribers paid for fixed telephone lines and cell phones in Africa from 1994 and 2004. v.2

The number of subscribers paid for fixed telephone lines and cell phones in Africa from 1994 and 2004. v. 2
The line graph illustrates data on the number of landline subscribers and cell phone in Africa, from 1995 to 2004. As it is observed from the graph, the landline and cellphone subscribers both had an upward trend. It is also noticeable that the amount of people who subscribed to mobile phones exceeded the figure for landline in 2006. In 1994, Africans subscribers for fixed telephone was at 1. 7, compared to just only 0. 06 for cell phones. Over the following six years, the people who subscribed to mobile phone significantly increase to 2, while the figure for landline fluctuated to 2. 2. In the year 2001, the amount of subscribers for both types of phone services was just 2. 6 on each. By 2004, the number of people who subscribed to cellphone rose to the peak at 8. 8, which was almost three times as much as the figure for landline subscribers at 3. 3.
The line graph illustrates data on the number of landline
subscribers
and cell
phone
in Africa, from 1995 to 2004.

As it
is observed
from the graph, the landline and cellphone
subscribers
both had an upward trend. It is
also
noticeable that the amount of
people
who subscribed to mobile
phones
exceeded the figure for landline in 2006.

In 1994, Africans
subscribers
for
fixed
telephone was at 1. 7, compared to
just
only
0. 06 for cell
phones
. Over the following six years, the
people
who subscribed to mobile
phone
significantly
increase to 2, while the figure for landline fluctuated to 2. 2.

In the year 2001, the amount of
subscribers
for both types of
phone
services was
just
2. 6 on each. By 2004, the number of
people
who subscribed to cellphone rose to the peak at 8. 8, which was almost three times as much as the figure for landline
subscribers
at 3. 3.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic The number of subscribers paid for fixed telephone lines and cell phones in Africa from 1994 and 2004. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
156 words
6.5
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