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RE-WRITE: The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons. v.2

RE-WRITE: The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
The data in table gives sales information of small restaurant located in downtown business district for October week(7th-13th). A glance at the table reveals the fact that, all over the week, sales happened over the lunch time is always less than the dinner time. As is presented sales happened on Saturday and Sunday during lunch and dinner is very low, when compared with other days in a week. Remarkable sale happened at Friday at dinner time. All other days except Saturday and Sunday, the sales at lunch time is in range of 2350 to 2600, on the other hand the sales at dinner time is in range of 3400 to 3850. To Recapitulate, the sales on Sundays and Saturdays had fallen down. On Friday at dinner time, sales happened in a noticeable manner, this might be because of start of weekend.
The data in table gives
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sales
information of
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small
restaurant located in downtown business district for October week(7th-13th).

A glance at the table reveals the fact that, all over the week,
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sales
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happened
over the lunch
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time
is always less than the
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dinner
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time
. As
is presented
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sales
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happened
on Saturday and Sunday during lunch and
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dinner
is
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very
low, when compared with other days in a week. Remarkable
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sale
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happened
at Friday at
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dinner
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time
. All other days except Saturday and Sunday, the
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sales
at lunch
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time
is in range of 2350 to 2600,
on the other hand
the
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sales
at
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dinner
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time
is in range of 3400 to 3850.

To Recapitulate, the
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sales
on Sundays and Saturdays had fallen down. On Friday at
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dinner
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time
,
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sales
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happened
Consider replacing "in a noticeable manner" with the adverb for "noticeable"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a noticeable manner
, this might be
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because
of
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start
of weekend.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic RE-WRITE: The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
141 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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