RE-WRITE: The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons. v.2
RE-WRITE: The table below shows the sales at a small restaurant in a downtown business district.
The data in table gives sales information of small restaurant located in downtown business district for October week(7th-13th).
A glance at the table reveals the fact that, all over the week, sales happened over the lunch time is always less than the dinner time. As is presented sales happened on Saturday and Sunday during lunch and dinner is very low, when compared with other days in a week. Remarkable sale happened at Friday at dinner time. All other days except Saturday and Sunday, the sales at lunch time is in range of 2350 to 2600, on the other hand the sales at dinner time is in range of 3400 to 3850.
To Recapitulate, the sales on Sundays and Saturdays had fallen down. On Friday at dinner time, sales happened in a noticeable manner, this might be because of start of weekend.
The data in table gives
sales
information of
small
restaurant located in downtown business district for October week(7th-13th).
A glance at the table reveals the fact that, all over the week,
sales
happened
over the lunch
time
is always less than the
dinner
time
. As
is presented
sales
happened
on Saturday and Sunday during lunch and
dinner
is
very
low, when compared with other days in a week. Remarkable
sale
happened
at Friday at
dinner
time
. All other days except Saturday and Sunday, the
sales
at lunch
time
is in range of 2350 to 2600,
on the other hand
the
sales
at
dinner
time
is in range of 3400 to 3850.
To Recapitulate, the
sales
on Sundays and Saturdays had fallen down. On Friday at
dinner
time
,
sales
happened
in a noticeable manner
, this might be
because
of
start
of weekend.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes