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some people believe that movies should be based on social stigmas while other believe that it should be based on real life hero. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

some people believe that movies should be based on social stigmas while other believe that it should be based on real life hero. v. 2
" Movies inspire us, challenge are assumption, change are views, sometimes break our heart too, left are soul, and yes, teach us life lessons" . one of most pressing concerns is regarding the given topic whether movies should be based on; social stigmas or real life hero? In this essay, I am going to examine this questions from both points of views. On one side of the argument there are people who believe that movies should be based on social stigmas. They raise many assertions in defence such as some people have discrimination factor in there mind, especially related skin colour. Moreover, that type of discrimination have been in school, colege, and society because in these places there are many British people, and they donot like the people with dark colour. Inaddition to this, people should be aware with the help of social stigma movies. The best epitome is that in the movie of " The Color Purple" , people had lot of discrimination factor as in this movie, one dark color women face lot of problems in there life. So, movies should be make based on social stigmas. On the flip side, there are antagonists to this assertion who believe that movies should be based on real life hero. They bolster their view point by claming that most of the people love to watch those movies that is based on real life story. The successful exampleis that in the movie of " Bhaag Milkha Bhaag" , Milkha singh did lot of hardwork for achieve there gaol as this movie motivated the people do hardwork in there life for achieve the successful life. Nevertheless, weighting both the opinion, I believe that there is no single conclusion still, I take this ground on effective clap required the use of both hands. So, In the society both movies are playing an important role because people learn lot of things from the movies.
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IELTS academic some people believe that movies should be based on social stigmas while other believe that it should be based on real life hero. v. 2

Academic
  American English
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