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People in your area are having problems wit their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter. Describe the problems, Explain how they are affecting people, say what the company should do to help, v.3

People in your area are having problems wit their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter. Describe the problems, Explain how they are affecting people, say what the company should do to help, v. 3
Dear Sir, The purpose of this letter is to apprise you about the problems in broadband services in North Nazimabad Town. However, my name is Aamir. I am one of the users of your internet services. Furthermore, I am a student of engineering. I use the internet for making assignments and study purposes. Therefore, I would like to describe the problems incurring while using the internet. Firstly, the connectivity problem. More often internet disconnects cause breaks in downloads, uploads or browsing. Seldom, it becomes difficult to finish the assignment, research or tasks on time. Secondly, Besides the connectivity problem, internet speed progresses slowly comparatively to the subscribed package of 2 MBPS. Finally, the video hangs while watching online video lectures. Therefore, I request you to take these issues into your consideration and make possible solutions to these problems. All these problems incurred after reinstallation of cables in our town. Some of my fellow using the same service as I do accusation the same issues and notice repercussion of these problems after the upgrade. I hope you take this matter as urgent and resolve issues at your earliest. Yours Faithfully, Amir
Dear Sir,

The purpose of this letter is to apprise you about the
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problems
in broadband services in North
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Nazimabad
Town.
However
, my name is
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Aamir
. I am one of the users of your internet services.
Furthermore
, I am a student of engineering. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the internet for making assignments and study purposes.
Therefore
, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
describe
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
incurring while using the internet.

Firstly
, the connectivity
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problem
. More
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often
internet disconnects cause breaks in downloads, uploads or browsing.
The adverb 'Seldom' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
Seldom
, it becomes difficult to finish the assignment, research or tasks on time.
Secondly
,
Besides
the connectivity
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problem
, internet speed progresses
slowly
comparatively
to the subscribed package of 2 MBPS.
Finally
, the video hangs while watching online video lectures.
Therefore
, I request you to take these issues into your consideration and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
possible solutions to these problems.

All these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
incurred after reinstallation of cables in our town.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
of my fellow using the same service as I do accusation the same issues and notice repercussion of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
problems
after the upgrade.

I hope you take this matter as urgent and resolve issues at your earliest.

Yours
Faithfully
,

Amir
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic People in your area are having problems wit their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter. Describe the problems, Explain how they are affecting people, say what the company should do to help, v. 3

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
189 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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