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The line chart gives information about the population rate in four different countries from 1970 to 2010 and it is estimated to 2030. v.2

The line chart gives information about the population rate in four different countries from 1970 to 2010 and it is estimated to 2030. v. 2
The line chart gives information about the population rate in four different countries from 1970 to 2010 and it is estimated to 2030. Overall, the proportion of population increases in each country between 1970 and 2030. It is noticeable that USA has the largest population during the entire period. In 1970, 70% of residents in US lived in cities, compared to 40% of Korea and 20% of China and India each. The percentage of population in USA and in Korea rose significantly over the next 40 years, reaching under 90% and 85% respectively. During the same period China population witnessed a climb sharp to over 60% in 2010, exceeding the figure for India, which had only over 30% at the same time. Looking into the future, the percentage of citizens in USA and in Korea is expected to rise gradually to 90% each from 2020 to 2030. By 2030, it is forecast that people who lived in China will rise to 65%, whereas the figure for India will be predicted to remain at 35% at the end.
The line chart gives information about the
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population
rate in four
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different
countries from 1970 to 2010 and it
is estimated
to 2030.

Overall
, the proportion of
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population
increases in each country between 1970 and 2030. It is noticeable that USA has the largest
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population
during the entire period.

In 1970, 70% of residents in US
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lived
in cities, compared to 40% of Korea and 20% of China and India each. The percentage of
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population
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in USA
and in Korea rose
significantly
over the
next
40 years, reaching under 90% and 85%
respectively
. During the same period China
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population
witnessed a climb sharp to over 60% in 2010, exceeding the figure for India, which had
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only
over 30% at the same time.

Looking into the future, the percentage of citizens
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in USA
and in Korea is
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expected
to rise
gradually
to 90% each from 2020 to 2030. By 2030, it is forecast that
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people
who
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lived
in China will rise to 65%, whereas the figure for India will
be predicted
to remain at 35% at the
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end
.
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IELTS academic The line chart gives information about the population rate in four different countries from 1970 to 2010 and it is estimated to 2030. v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
177 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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