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The methods used by international students when booking the online English courses in three different countries in 2009 and 2010 v.1

The methods used by international students when booking the online English courses in three different countries in 2009 and 2010 v. 1
The pie charts give information about how foreign students registered the online English courses in Australia, USA and Canada in 2009 and 2010. Overall, the proportion of international students used Internet to book the course all increased over years in three countries. The 3 remained categories varied upward and forward differently by years and by countries. In 2009, the percentages of registration by Internet in Australia, USA and Canada were 24%, 25% and 27%, respectively. These number then considerably rose up by 3% to 28% in USA and 30% in Canada while Australia witnessed a significant growth to 39% in 2010. Students who pre-booked with agents accounted for both 26% in Australia and Canada and 23% in USA in 2009. In spite of the development of this method in USA and Canada to 26% and 35% in 2010, the same kind of figure sharply dropped to 17% in Australia. The percentages of international students booked the course on arrival in Australia and Canada were similar of 30%, this figure in USA was 24% in 2009. Whereas this ratio of USA stood stable, the figure of Canada decreased by half to 15% and Australia increased by 5% to 35% in 2010. Others method accounted for 20%, 28% and 7% in Australia, USA and Canada respectively then fell to 13% and 22% in Australia and America, and went up in Canada to 20% in 2010.
The pie charts give information about how foreign
students
registered the online English courses in Australia, USA and Canada in 2009 and 2010.

Overall
, the proportion of international
students
used
Internet to book the course all increased over years in three countries. The 3 remained categories varied upward and forward
differently
by years and by countries.

In 2009, the percentages of registration by Internet in Australia, USA and Canada were 24%, 25% and 27%,
respectively
. These number then
considerably
rose up by 3% to 28%
in USA
and 30% in Canada while Australia witnessed a significant growth to 39% in 2010.
Students
who pre-booked with agents accounted for both 26% in Australia and Canada and 23%
in USA
in 2009.
In spite of
the development of this method
in USA
and Canada to 26% and 35% in 2010, the same kind of figure
sharply
dropped to 17% in Australia.

The percentages of international
students
booked the course on arrival in Australia and Canada were similar of 30%, this figure
in USA
was 24% in 2009. Whereas this ratio
of USA
stood stable, the figure of Canada decreased by half to 15% and Australia increased by 5% to 35% in 2010. Others method accounted for 20%, 28% and 7% in Australia, USA and Canada
respectively
then fell to 13% and 22% in Australia and America, and went up in Canada to 20% in 2010.
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IELTS academic The methods used by international students when booking the online English courses in three different countries in 2009 and 2010 v. 1

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