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IT IS BETTER FOR COLLEGE STUDENTS TO LIVE FAR AWAY FROM HOME THAN LIVE AT HOME WITH THEIR PARENTS. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? v.15

IT IS BETTER FOR COLLEGE STUDENTS TO LIVE FAR AWAY FROM HOME THAN LIVE AT HOME WITH THEIR PARENTS. v. 15
It is argued that independent student accommodation is one of the aspects that often pay attention to university students while many people think that residing in the academy is better to living home with their parents. I totally agree with this view for a number of reasons. First off, it can be seen from staying in a dorm is quite useful for the number of youth who prepare to study the university education programs. It is no doubt that the room of student is located nearly the classroom which will make individuals lost fewer times to commute daily. By contrast, these students accommodation far away from school can dedicate more time to move, not to mention frequent traffic jams that could prevent them from going to school punctually. In addition, students need to go outside and get their own experience. This first experience will teach them about solve the various cases and wrestling with lots of challenges. This falsifies the apprehensions and hypothetical worries of their parents about them. As a matter of fact, this is possible only if they have survival opportunity alone from the support of family. Finally, the number of schoolchildren live with their family due to lack of finance. However, in these cases, they usually have other ways to obtain the development of a healthy personality. In conclusion, it seems to me that living in college is the better option for students for the above-mentioned reasons during higher education, as of course, it is the base to their future, especially, professional life.
It
is argued
that independent
student
accommodation is one of the aspects that
often
pay attention to university
students
while
many
people
think
that residing in the academy is better to living home with their parents. I
totally
agree
with this view for a number of reasons.

First
off, it can be
seen
from staying in a dorm is quite useful for the number of youth who prepare to study the university education programs. It is no doubt that the room of
student
is located
nearly
the classroom which will
make
individuals lost fewer times to commute daily. By contrast, these
students
accommodation far away from school can dedicate more time to
move
, not to mention frequent traffic jams that could
prevent
them from going to school
punctually
.

In addition
,
students
need to go outside and
get
their
own
experience. This
first
experience will teach them about solve the various cases and wrestling with lots of challenges. This falsifies the apprehensions and hypothetical worries of their parents about them. As a matter of fact, this is possible
only
if they have survival opportunity alone from the support of family.
Finally
, the number of schoolchildren
live
with their family due to lack of finance.
However
, in these cases, they
usually
have other ways to obtain the development of a healthy personality.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that living in college is the better option for
students
for the above-mentioned reasons during higher education, as
of course
, it is the base to their future,
especially
, professional life.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS academic IT IS BETTER FOR COLLEGE STUDENTS TO LIVE FAR AWAY FROM HOME THAN LIVE AT HOME WITH THEIR PARENTS. v. 15

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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