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The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who are able to read and write in the different regions of the world and the world average in 2004. v.2

The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who are able to read and write in the different regions of the world and the world average in 2004. v. 2
Given is the graph illustrating the proportion of literal people in 7 worldwide regions compared to the world average in 2004. It is clear that the number of men who had literacy in region 6 was the highest. By contrast, women in region 2 were the category receiving the least expenditure. To embark on, region 6 was the category having the largest men who are able to read and write, at about 70%, while, the figure for world average, region 5 and region 7 was significantly lower, at 65%. However, the rest of the regions did not have the percentage which was over 60%, especially, region 4 made up the smallest proportion, at 47%. For region 6, the proportion of women having knowledge was also highest among 8 areas, at 63%. World average accounted for 57%, at the same time, 41%, 43%, 45% were the category for region 1, region 4, region 5, and region 6 respectively. The figure for region 2 was the lowest, at only 38%.
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compared to the world average in 2004.

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that the number of
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who had literacy in
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6 was the highest. By contrast, women in
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2 were the category receiving the least expenditure.

To embark on,
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6 was the category having the largest
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who are able to read and write, at about 70%, while, the figure for world average,
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5 and
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7 was
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lower, at 65%.
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did not have the percentage which was over 60%,
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4 made up the smallest proportion, at 47%.

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6, the proportion of women having knowledge was
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highest among 8 areas, at 63%. World average accounted for 57%, at the same time, 41%, 43%, 45% were the category for
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1,
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5, and
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6
respectively
. The figure for
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2 was the lowest, at
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the percentage of people who are able to read and write in the different regions of the world and the world average in 2004. v. 2

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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