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Some people believe that economic growth of any country reduces poverty and hunger while other think that it causes damage to the environment. Discuss both the views and give your opinion v.2

Some people believe that economic growth of any country reduces poverty and hunger while other think that it causes damage to the environment. 2
With the steady growth in modernisation, The lifestyle of people have been greatly affected. They have achieved various milestones. However, some issues remain unchallenged and as complex as ever. One such issue here is that economic development. This particular topic asserts that economic growth: should it is responsible for reduction in poverty and hunger or vandalism to eco system? Through this essay, I shall explore the dimesions of this topic and shape up my opinion by the end. On one side, there is group of people who believe that economic development reduces poverty and hunger. In this present era, poverty and hunger is the “burning question of the day”. They strengthen their view point by claiming that there is rapid flourishment in the industry sector. Due to this, new industries are open. The industries require more and more labour. With the help of this, each and every individual work which helps them to handle the budget of thier family. The outcome is that, it become very beneficial to reduce the issue of poverty and hunger. The best epitome is that, there is a survey counducted by hindustan times in which they said that in the developed countries; industries are open on a large scale which helps them to minimize the poverty and hunger as compare to undeveloped countries. On the flip side, there are antagonists to this assertions who believe that economic growth harm to the environment. They bolster their view point they claim that there is a advancemt in agriculture sector. The large amount of pesticides and insectides are use to get best crop. Well, these chemicals assist to improve the yield of crop and helps to reduce hunger and poverty but, no doubt; they depletion the abiotic sector such as water bodies and soil by polluting them which are the “part and parcel” of human life. Zimbabwe would be the perfect example of this. There is a survey conducted by environment department and they find out that in zimbabwe they take lots of step to minimize their poverty and hunger but, the outcome is that they had been unbalance the environment. To crown it all, I pen down saying that, weighing both the option; I believe that there is no single conclusion still; I take this ground that an effective clap requires both use of hands so i think poverty and hunger should be reduce but without any distrubance in the environment.
With the steady growth in
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modernisation
, The lifestyle of
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people
have been
greatly
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affected
. They have achieved various milestones.
However
,
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some
issues remain unchallenged and as complex as ever. One such issue here is that
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economic
development. This particular topic asserts that
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economic
growth: should it is responsible for reduction in
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poverty
and
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hunger
or vandalism to
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eco system
? Through this essay, I shall explore the
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dimesions
of this topic and shape up my opinion by the
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end
.

On one side, there is group of
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people
who believe that
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economic
development
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reduces
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poverty
and
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hunger
. In this present era,
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poverty
and
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hunger
is the “burning question of the day”. They strengthen their view point by claiming that there is rapid
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flourishment
in the
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industry
sector. Due to this, new
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industries
are open. The
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industries
require more and more
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labour
. With the
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help
of this, each and every individual work which
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helps
them to handle the budget of
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thier
family. The outcome is that, it
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become
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very
beneficial to
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reduce
the issue of
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poverty
and
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hunger
. The best epitome is that, there is a survey
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counducted
by
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hindustan
times in which they said that in the
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developed countries
;
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industries
are open on a large scale which
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helps
them to minimize the
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poverty
and
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hunger
as compare to undeveloped countries.

On the flip side, there are antagonists to
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this
assertions who believe that
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economic
growth harm to the environment. They bolster their view point they claim that there is
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a
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advancemt
in agriculture sector. The large amount of pesticides and
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insectides
are
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use to
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get
best crop. Well, these chemicals assist to
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improve
the yield of crop and
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helps
to
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reduce
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hunger
and
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poverty
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but
, no doubt;
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they depletion
the abiotic sector such as water bodies and soil by polluting them which are the “part and parcel” of human life. Zimbabwe would be the perfect example of this. There is a survey conducted by environment
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department and
they find out that in
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zimbabwe
they take
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lots of step
to minimize their
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poverty
and
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hunger
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but
, the outcome is that they had been unbalance the environment.

To crown it all, I pen down saying that, weighing both the option; I believe that there is no single conclusion
still
; I take this ground that an effective clap requires both
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use
of hands
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so
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i
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think
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poverty
and
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hunger
should be
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reduce
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but
without any
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distrubance
in the environment.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Mistakes

IELTS academic Some people believe that economic growth of any country reduces poverty and hunger while other think that it causes damage to the environment. 2

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