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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.33

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 33
It is a controversial issue that the government should finance train tracks instead of spending its budget on roads. I would actively see eye to eye with this statement as spending on railways able to fully utilize the citizens' taxes. First of all, the advent of technology has brought tremendous benefits to human life in this day and age. The government should spend money on using advanced technology on the train. For example, using the latest technology on the railway is convenient for the citizens as it reduces the travel time to traverse around the city as well as cost-effective. Furthermore, a high-speed train can reduce traffic congestion, improve mobility and reliability of travel on the roads. For instance, ambulances and firefighters can increase their throughput across their service during an emergency. Besides, saving the Earth by reducing air pollution is one of the benefits of building a subway. To illustrate, when people are keen on taking trains to travel, it can reduce the carbon monoxide emissions from cars. Carbon monoxide emissions can facilitate global warming to our Mother Earth. Due to air pollution, it can reduce the life expectancy of people as the toxic air quality endangers our health. Moreover, spending citizen' s taxes on railways can cut down the percentage of accidents happen on the road. For example, according to the news, traffic accidents have been increasing year by year as the enhancement of using automobiles. Therefore, taking trains can increase the possibility of life expectancy and life satisfaction of the public. In conclusion, with all the new advances and innovations in this modern era, the government should choose the smart expenditure to maintain a safe and healthy life for the citizens.
It is a controversial issue that the
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government
should finance
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train
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tracks
instead
of spending its budget on roads. I would
actively
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see
eye to eye with this statement as spending on railways able to
fully
utilize the
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citizens&
#039; taxes.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the advent of technology has brought tremendous benefits to human
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life
in this day and age. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should spend money on using advanced technology on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
train
.
For example
, using the latest technology on the railway is convenient for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
as it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reduces
the travel time to traverse around the city
as well
as cost-effective.
Furthermore
, a high-speed
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train
can
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reduce
traffic congestion,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
mobility and reliability of travel on the roads.
For instance
, ambulances and firefighters can increase their throughput across their service during an emergency.

Besides
, saving the Earth by reducing air pollution is one of the benefits of building a subway. To illustrate, when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are keen on taking
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trains
to travel, it can
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reduce
the carbon monoxide emissions from cars. Carbon monoxide emissions can facilitate global warming to our Mother Earth. Due to air pollution, it can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reduce
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
expectancy of
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people
as the toxic air quality endangers our health.
Moreover
, spending
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citizen&
#039; s taxes on railways can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down the percentage of accidents happen on the road.
For example
, according to the news, traffic accidents have been increasing year by year as the enhancement of using automobiles.
Therefore
, taking
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
can increase the possibility of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
expectancy and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
satisfaction of the public.

In conclusion
, with all the new advances and innovations in this modern era, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should choose the smart expenditure to maintain a safe and healthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS academic Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? v. 33

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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