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Essay topics: Historically, schools in the US have borrowed the European system of school organization, a system that separates students into grades by chronological age. In general, children begin formal schooling at the age of six in what is referred to v.2

Essay topics: Historically, schools in the US have borrowed the European system of school organization, a system that separates students into grades by chronological age. In general, children begin formal schooling at the age of six in what is referred to v. 2
The article states characteristics of a graded system in schools and provide several reasons of support. However, the professor explains that graded system which is practiced in schools does not efficiently focus on students at an individual level and he refutes each of the author' s reasons. First, the reading claims that children begin formal schooling at the age of six in what is referred to as the first grade. The professor refutes this point by saying that each student has his own maturity level. He states that each student is disparate. Some students might attain considerable maturity at the age of four or five and some are not even ready at the age of six lacking mental, social and physical maturity. Second, the article posits that students in the graded system are promoted through twelve grades; however, if students do not meet the minimum requirements for a specific grade may be asked to repeat the year. The professor opposes the aforementioned point by saying that this system of promotion need to be viewed again. He says that repeating might ignite negative effects in some students. Moreover, professor points that repeating the year excessively bores the students as they have to study the same content. He also explains that some students need extra time to understand and to learn the subjects; on the other hand, some students learns quickly and have to wait for the teachers to provide them with new material. In order to conclude, I would say that professor provides rational explanations to refute the author' s points over the graded system.
The article states characteristics of a graded
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system
in schools and provide several reasons of support.
However
, the
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professor
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explains
that graded
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system
which
is practiced
in schools does not
efficiently
focus on
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students
at an individual
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level and
he refutes each of the
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#039; s reasons.

First
, the reading claims that children
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begin
formal schooling at the age of six in what
is referred
to as the
first
grade. The
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professor
refutes this
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point
by saying that each
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student
has his
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own
maturity level. He states that each
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student
is disparate.
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Some
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students
might attain considerable maturity at the age of four or five and
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some
are not even ready at the age of six lacking mental, social and physical maturity.

Second, the article posits that
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students
in the graded
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system
are promoted
through twelve grades;
however
, if
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students
do not
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meet
the minimum requirements for a specific grade may
be asked
to repeat the year. The
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professor
opposes the aforementioned
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point
by saying that this
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system
of promotion need to
be viewed
again. He says that repeating might ignite
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negative
effects in
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some
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students
.
Moreover
,
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professor
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points
that repeating the year
excessively
bores the
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students
as they
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have to
study the same content. He
also
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explains
that
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some
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students
need extra time to understand and to learn the subjects;
on the other hand
,
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some
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students
learns
quickly
and
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have to
wait for the teachers to provide them with new material.

In order
to conclude
, I would say that
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professor
provides rational explanations to refute the
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author&
#039; s
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points
over the graded
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system
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic Essay topics: Historically, schools in the US have borrowed the European system of school organization, a system that separates students into grades by chronological age. In general, children begin formal schooling at the age of six in what is referred to v. 2

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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