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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians not individuals as individuals can do too little To what extent do you agree or disagree v.3

Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians not individuals as individuals can do too little v. 3
Numerous people these days believed that authority is the only factor that engaged with environmental preservation. From my perspective, while the government play an important role in protecting the environment, each ordinary individual can also make a significant contribution On the one hand, it is irrefutable that the government is taking the lead in preserving the ecosystem. First and foremost, several serious problems need the financial resources of the government. It seems to be true that the government is the only organization that can afford to purchase state-of-the-art technological devices and pay for experienced scientists. Moreover, there are long-term projects that need stability investigation from taxes and other fees. In the second place, the government can enforce legislation on environmental protection. By the way of illustration, the emission discharging from manufactories and households might be limited by prescribing the discharge level on specialized law. In addition, imposing strict punishments such as heavy fined or even imprisonment to the act of damaging the environment can also be a good case in point Nevertheless, the responsibility of each citizen should not be underestimated. First of all, environmental problems can only be solved thoroughly with the cooperation of the authority and the population. If each individual had an awareness of protecting the environment, the situation would be much more easily. The deforestation, for instance, can never be eliminated when farmers keep cutting down trees to meet their demands, regardless of the administration' s regulations. Secondly, there are a great number of people voluntarily spend their time to preserving the environment. Accumulating small actions can make a world of difference. This is shown by several beaches throughout the global now clean again thanks to the volunteers who even diving into the water to pick up trash To sum up, while the government plays an important part in preserving the ecosystem thanks to its financial resources and the legislation systems, the contribution of each individual deserves honorable
Numerous
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people
these days believed that authority is the
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only
factor that engaged with environmental preservation. From my perspective, while the
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government
play an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
role in protecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
, each ordinary individual can
also
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make
a significant
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contribution


On the one hand, it is irrefutable that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is taking the lead in preserving the ecosystem.
First
and foremost, several serious problems need the financial resources of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
. It seems to be true that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
organization that can afford to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
state-of-the-art technological devices and pay for experienced scientists.
Moreover
, there are long-term projects that need stability investigation from taxes and other fees. In the second place, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
can enforce legislation on environmental protection. By the way of illustration, the emission discharging from
Possible spelling mistake found.
manufactories
and households might
be limited
by prescribing the discharge level on specialized law.
In addition
, imposing strict punishments such as heavy fined or even imprisonment to the act of damaging the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
can
also
be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
case in
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
point


Nevertheless
, the responsibility of each citizen should not
be underestimated
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, environmental problems can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be solved
thoroughly
with the cooperation of the authority and the population. If each individual had an awareness of protecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
, the situation would be much more
easily
. The deforestation,
for instance
, can never
be eliminated
when farmers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
cutting down trees to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
their demands, regardless of the
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administration&
#039; s regulations.
Secondly
, there are a great number of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
voluntarily
spend their time to preserving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
. Accumulating
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
actions can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a world of difference. This
is shown
by several beaches throughout the global
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
clean again thanks to the volunteers who even diving into the water to pick up
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
trash


To sum up, while the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
plays an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
part in preserving the ecosystem thanks to its financial resources and the legislation systems, the contribution of each individual deserves honorable
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians not individuals as individuals can do too little v. 3

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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