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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v.9

Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 9
The provided line graph illustrates the acid level in the mouth which is caused by the consumption of cane sugar, fruit sugar, and honey. As is shown in the graph, the higher the acid level, the lower the pH level. It is also illustrated that a pH level less than 5. 5 is the stage when tooth decay occurs. It is significant that the initial pH level in our mouth is 7, and it drops the moment we eat sugar. In the first 5 minutes, the graph shows that eating cane sugar results in a major drop in the pH level which reaches 3. 5 and then begins to increase very slowly in half an hour. During this phase, tooth decay is most likely to happen. It is almost the same when eating fruit sugar, as the pH level drops to less than 4. 5 in 5 minutes, and remains at the detrimental level for about 20 minutes. Moreover, the pH level drops to less than 5 when honey is taken, and it possesses the threat of tooth decay for only 10 minutes. So, honey is the least dangerous among the three kinds of food items. In summary, it appears that cane sugar is the most detrimental one for our dental health while honey is the safest one.
The provided line graph illustrates the acid
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level
in the mouth which
is caused
by the consumption of cane
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sugar
, fruit
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sugar
, and honey. As
is shown
in the graph, the higher the acid
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level
, the lower the pH
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level
. It is
also
illustrated that a pH
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level
less than 5. 5 is the stage when tooth decay occurs.

It is significant that the initial pH
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level
in our mouth is 7, and it drops the moment we eat
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sugar
. In the
first
5 minutes, the graph
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shows
that eating cane
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sugar
results in a major drop in the pH
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level
which reaches 3. 5 and then
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begins
to increase
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very
slowly
in half an hour. During this phase, tooth decay is most likely to happen. It is almost the same when eating fruit
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sugar
, as the pH
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level
drops to less than 4. 5 in 5 minutes, and remains at the detrimental
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level
for about 20 minutes.
Moreover
, the pH
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level
drops to less than 5 when honey
is taken
, and it possesses the threat of tooth decay for
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only
10 minutes.
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So
, honey is the least
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dangerous
among the three kinds of food items.

In summary, it appears that cane
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sugar
is the most detrimental one for our dental health while honey is the safest one.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 9

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
218 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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