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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v.4

Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 4
The bar graph illustrates the acid level of mouth after consumption of three different nutrients such as fruit sugar, cane sugar and honey over the period of forty minutes. According to the bar graph, it is obvious that cane sugar is the most acidic nutrient. After the consumption of cane sugar, acidity level of month increased sharply in five minutes and reached 3. 5 pH level. From now onwards acidity level of mouth decreases steadily and reached the normal level after thirty-five minutes. However, teeth remained at the dangerous level more than 25 minutes. Another acidic nutrient is fruit sugar. After the consumption, the pH level of mouth decreased hurriedly and reached 4. 25 in five minutes. After that, the level of acidity of month reached a normal level in 15 minutes. Therefore, teeth remained at the dangerous level for 15 minutes. The last and the least acidic nutrient is honey, after the consumption of honey acidity level of mouth increased dramatically in five minutes and reached 5 pH level and then, plateau for 5 minutes and from now onward decreased moderately. However, teeth remained in an acidic environment for 10 minutes. To conclude, the more hazardous nutrient for teeth is cane sugar because teeth remained in an acidic environment for more than 25 minutes.
The bar graph illustrates the acid
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, the more hazardous
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for teeth is
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environment for more than 25 minutes.
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IELTS academic Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 4

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