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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v.3

Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 3
answer this question first mention the acid / pH level which occurs the tooth decay and the level when it is safe. Now take the three given food items and mention them individually: how long it takes to reach the pH level of mouth below 5. 5 after consuming this food item and then how long this level remains under 5. 5. Finally, suggest which food items are comparatively safer and which are not. Summary of the Line Graph: After consuming different sweet food items, the acid level of our mouth increases. The higher acid level is presented by the lower pH value. When the pH value gets under 5. 5, the tooth decay occurs. Among the given three food items i. e. cane sugar, fruit sugar and honey, the third item (honey) is comparatively safer for our dental health. This is because after consuming all the honey the pH level remains at danger level for about 12 minutes compared to the 20 minutes for the fruit sugar and 31 minutes for cane sugar. This also indicates that the cane sugar is more likely to damage our tooth among the provided three sweet food items.
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answer
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first
mention the acid / pH
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level
which occurs the tooth decay and the
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level
when it is safe.
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Now
take the three
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given
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food
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items
and mention them
individually
: how long it takes to reach the pH
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level
of mouth below 5. 5 after consuming this
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food
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item
and then how long this
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level
remains under 5. 5.
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, suggest which
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food
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items
are
comparatively
safer and which are not.

Summary of the Line Graph:

After consuming
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different
sweet
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food
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items
, the acid
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level
of our mouth increases. The higher acid
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level
is presented
by the lower pH value.
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When
the pH value
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gets
under 5. 5, the tooth decay occurs. Among the
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given
three
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food
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items
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i. e.
cane
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sugar
, fruit
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sugar
and honey, the third
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item
(honey) is
comparatively
safer for our dental health. This is
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because
after consuming all the honey the pH
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level
remains at
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danger
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level
for about 12 minutes compared to the 20 minutes for the fruit
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sugar
and 31 minutes for cane
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sugar
. This
also
indicates that the cane
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sugar
is more likely to damage our tooth among the provided three sweet
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food
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items
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS academic Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 3

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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