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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v.12

Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 12
The line graph shows the variation of acid levels in our mouth which are produced by the consumptions of sweet foods - fruit sugar, cane sugar, and honey. It also illustrates the safe acid level against tooth decay and the level is also presented using the pH values. The level of acidity in mouth varies based on the types of food we consume and as shown in the graph, the lower the pH level, the higher the acidity. The initial level of pH in our mouth is seven and below it, the acidity rises. In the first five minutes of the consumption of fruit sugar, the pH level decrease to about 3. 5 and in the case of cane sugar consumption, it reaches to roughly 4. 5. Finally, it touches approximately 5. 0 pH level for the consumption of honey. Therefore, all of them are in the unsafe zone where tooth decay is likely to happen, which is set below 5. 5. The acidity created from the eating of honey reaches the safe level in less than fifteen minutes. Cane and fruit sugar created acidity reaches the safe level in about thirty and twenty minutes respectively. In conclusion, honey consumption causes the minimum tooth decay, hence the safest amongst the three for our dental health and cane sugar is the most dangerous sweet items for our teeth.
The line graph
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shows
the variation of acid
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levels
in our mouth which
are produced
by the
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consumptions
of sweet foods
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fruit
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sugar
,
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cane
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sugar
, and honey. It
also
illustrates the safe acid
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level
against tooth decay and the
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level
is
also
presented using the pH values.

The
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level
of acidity in mouth varies based on the types of food we consume and as shown in the graph, the lower the pH
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level
, the higher the acidity. The initial
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level
of pH in our mouth is seven and below it, the acidity rises. In the
first
five minutes of the
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consumption
of fruit
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sugar
, the pH
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level
decrease to about 3. 5 and in the case of
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cane
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sugar
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consumption
, it reaches to roughly 4. 5.
Finally
, it touches approximately 5. 0 pH
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level
for the
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consumption
of honey.
Therefore
, all of them are in the unsafe zone where tooth decay is likely to happen, which
is set
below 5. 5. The acidity created from the eating of honey reaches the safe
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level
in less than fifteen minutes.
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Cane
and fruit
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sugar
created acidity reaches the safe
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level
in about thirty and twenty minutes
respectively
.

In conclusion
, honey
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consumption
causes the minimum tooth decay,
hence
the safest amongst the three for our dental health and
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cane
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sugar
is the most
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dangerous
sweet items for our teeth.
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IELTS academic Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 12

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3 paragraphs
227 words
6.0
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