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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v.11

Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 11
The line graph gives information about the acidity level of the mouth after ingesting three different sweet items- fruit sugar, cane sugar and honey over forty minutes. The lower the pH level of the mouth, the more acidic it becomes making it highly conducive to tooth decay formation. A pH level of 5. 5 and above indicates a safe zone, which means tooth decay, is unlikely to occur. Consequently, the pH value below 5. 5 is considered as the danger zone, which gives higher chance for the dental problem to happen. The line graphs show that the cane sugar is the most dangerous among the three sweets products mentioned. It becomes highly acidic at the pH level of 3. 5 after 5 minutes of consumption and remained acidic for almost half an hour. On the other hand, fruit sugar becomes acidic (4. 2 pH level), five minutes after consumption but reached the safe level of acidity after fifteen minutes. In contrast, honey gets the lowest acidity level (almost 5 pH level) after five minutes of ingestion and plateau on this level for another five minutes, then steadily decreases the acidity in the mouth, and thereby crosses the danger zone after 15 minutes of consumption. In summary, all the three sweet items have a chance to cause the tooth decay. However, among the three, honey is less likely to cause dental problems as it loses its acidity faster compared to fruit and cane sugars.
The line graph gives information about the acidity
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level
of the mouth after ingesting three
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different
sweet items- fruit
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sugar
, cane
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sugar
and honey over forty minutes. The lower the pH
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level
of the mouth, the more
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acidic
it becomes making it
highly
conducive to tooth decay formation.

A pH
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level
of 5. 5 and above indicates a safe zone, which means tooth decay, is unlikely to occur.
Consequently
, the pH value below 5. 5
is considered
as the
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danger
zone, which gives higher chance for the dental problem to happen.

The line graphs
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show
that the cane
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sugar
is the most
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dangerous
among the three sweets products mentioned. It becomes
highly
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acidic
at the pH
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level
of 3. 5 after 5 minutes of consumption and remained
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acidic
for almost half an hour.
On the other hand
, fruit
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sugar
becomes
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acidic
(4. 2 pH
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level)
, five minutes after consumption
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but
reached the safe
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level
of acidity after fifteen minutes.
In contrast
, honey
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gets
the lowest acidity
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level
(almost 5 pH
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level)
after five minutes of ingestion and plateau on this
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level
for another five minutes, then
steadily
decreases the acidity in the mouth, and thereby crosses the
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danger
zone after 15 minutes of consumption.

In summary, all the three sweet items have a chance to cause the tooth decay.
However
, among the three, honey is less likely to cause dental problems as it loses its acidity faster compared to fruit and cane
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sugars
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 11

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  American English
4 paragraphs
243 words
6.5
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