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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v.13

Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 13
The provided graph illustrates the acid level in our mouths before and after the consumption of different sweet foods. It is obvious that pH level less than 5. 5 is detrimental to our teeth and the longer this level prevails the more damages it causes. Initially, the acid level of our mouth is 7, but after consuming sugary products the level begins to drop quickly in the first 5 minutes. It slowly tries to get to where it was at first, though it varies in different sugar deliveries. For instance, after the intake of honey, the pH level of mouth descends below 5. 5 in 5 minutes and it only takes around 15 minutes to get out of the danger zone, while the cane sugar lowers the pH level in just 3 minutes and it stays in the risk level almost for 35 minutes. Finally, fruit sugar causes the pH level to dip below 5. 5 in roughly 4 minutes and stays in hazard zone for about 20 minutes. To conclude, no matter what sort of sugary food we consume it does damage our teeth and makes them vulnerable. Although the risk of decaying differs from honey to cane sugar and honey seems to be the safest sweet food for our teeth.
The provided graph illustrates the acid
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in our mouths
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before
and after the consumption of
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sweet foods. It is obvious that pH
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level
less than 5. 5 is detrimental to our teeth and the longer this
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level
prevails the more damages it causes.

Initially
, the acid
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of our mouth is 7,
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but
after consuming sugary products the
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begins
to drop
quickly
in the
first
5 minutes. It
slowly
tries to
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get
to where it was at
first
, though it varies in
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different
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sugar
deliveries.
For instance
, after the intake of honey, the pH
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level
of mouth descends below 5. 5 in 5 minutes and it
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only
takes around 15 minutes to
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get
out of the
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danger
zone, while the cane
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sugar
lowers the pH
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in
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just
3 minutes and it stays in the
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risk
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almost for 35 minutes.
Finally
, fruit
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sugar
causes the pH
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to dip below 5. 5 in roughly 4 minutes and stays in hazard zone for about 20 minutes.

To conclude
, no matter what sort of sugary food we consume it does damage our teeth and
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makes
them vulnerable. Although the
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risk
of decaying differs from honey to cane
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sugar
and honey seems to be the safest sweet food for our teeth.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS academic Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) v. 13

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3 paragraphs
212 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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