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Charts A and B show the share of the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and cinema admission in the UK and Australia from 1976 to 2006. v.1

Charts A and B show the share of the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and cinema admission in the UK and Australia from 1976 to 2006. v. 1
The bar chart presents data on the origin of films which were screened in Australia and the UK in 2001 while the line graph compares the number of cinema attendants in these two countries between 1976 and 2006. Overall, Australian and Britsh theatres were dominated by American movies during the period, and more British went to movie theatres than their Australian counterparts between 1976 and 2005. As the data suggests, more than 75% movies that were released in the UK theatres in 2001 were produced in the USA while 20% were locally made. Besides, almost one in ten movies screened in the UK was produced in Australia. A similar movie screening trend could be observed in Australia in this year where American movies commanded the theatres with a 65% ratio. Australians could watch fewer UK-made movies as only one in twenty British films made it to Australian halls. Interestingly, locally produced films in Australia were ignorable in percentage - as their screening ratio suggests. It is obvious that more Brits enjoyed cinemas in a theatre than Australians did between 1976 and 2005. In 1975, over 100 million British watched movies in halls while this was just around 30 million in Australia. With some fluctuations, Australian movie-goers' number reached over 80 million after 3 decades. On the contrary, British cinema attendees dropped from 1977 to 1984, but afterwards steadily went up with some minor vacillations. After 30 years, almost 160 million British went to cinema halls- almost double than that of Australians.
The bar chart presents data on the origin of films which
were screened
in Australia and the UK in 2001 while the line graph compares the number of
cinema
attendants in these two countries between 1976 and 2006.

Overall
, Australian and
Britsh
theatres
were dominated
by American
movies
during the period, and more British went to
movie
theatres
than their Australian counterparts between 1976 and 2005.

As the data suggests, more than 75%
movies
that
were released
in the UK
theatres
in 2001
were produced
in the USA while 20% were
locally
made.
Besides
, almost one in ten
movies
screened in the UK
was produced
in Australia. A similar
movie
screening trend could
be observed
in Australia in this
year where
American
movies
commanded the
theatres
with a 65% ratio. Australians could
watch
fewer UK-made
movies
as
only
one in twenty British films made it to Australian halls.
Interestingly
,
locally
produced films in Australia were ignorable in percentage
-
as their screening ratio suggests.

It is obvious that more Brits enjoyed
cinemas
in a
theatre
than Australians did between 1976 and 2005. In 1975, over 100
million
British
watched
movies
in halls while this was
just
around 30
million
in Australia. With
some
fluctuations, Australian movie-goers' number reached over 80
million
after 3 decades.
On the contrary
, British
cinema
attendees dropped from 1977 to 1984,
but
afterwards
steadily
went up with
some
minor vacillations. After 30 years, almost 160
million
British went to
cinema
halls- almost
double
than that of Australians.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic Charts A and B show the share of the UK and Australian cinema market in 2001 and cinema admission in the UK and Australia from 1976 to 2006. v. 1

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