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You’ve just moved into a new house and found out that your furniture has been damaged by the removal company. Write to the manager of this company and say– Give you details. – Explain what happened and when. – What you think should be done about the v.2

You’ve just moved into a new house and found out that your furniture has been damaged by the removal company. Write to the manager of this company and say– Give you details. – Explain what happened and when. – What you think should be done about the v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing connection with my furniture that was damaged while being moved by your company from Lekki to my new house in Victoria Island. This is very serious as living without furniture even for a few days would be very uncomfortable for me and my family. The deal I made with your company was for your removal vehicles to show up before noon on Saturday. I understand traffic on the third mainland bridge can be heavy without warning on any given day; however, when I called to confirm why there was a delay, I was told the team responsible could not be reached. Unfortunately, they showed up late in the evening and hurriedly moved my furniture into the trucks without any lifting gear which led to the damages. I must say that I am very unhappy with this level of service. For $2, 000 including handling, I expect all my items to arrive in good condition. To compensate me for the damages to my furniture, I ask that a full refund be made to my bank account as soon as possible. I look forward to receiving a credit alert from your company as the earliest. Yours sincerely, Mr. Henry I. Fimibama.
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing connection with my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
furniture
that
was damaged
while being
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moved
by your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
from
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Lekki
to my new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
in Victoria Island. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
serious as living without
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
furniture
even for a few days would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
uncomfortable for me and my family.

The deal I made with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
was for your removal vehicles to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
up
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
noon on Saturday. I understand traffic on the third mainland bridge can be heavy without warning on any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
day;
however
, when I called to confirm why there was a delay, I was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
the team responsible could not
be reached
. Unfortunately, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
up late in the evening and
hurriedly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
furniture
into the trucks without any lifting gear which led to the damages.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
say that I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
unhappy with this level of service. For $2, 000 including handling, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
all my items to arrive in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
condition. To compensate me for the damages to my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
furniture
, I ask that a full refund
be made
to my bank account as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

I look forward to receiving a credit alert from your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
as the earliest.

Yours
sincerely
,

Mr. Henry I.
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Fimibama
.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You’ve just moved into a new house and found out that your furniture has been damaged by the removal company. Write to the manager of this company and say– Give you details. – Explain what happened and when. – What you think should be done about the v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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