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You need to take leave from your work of over one month for personal reasons Write a letter to your boss In your letter Explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need Explain how you will keep up to date while you are away Suggest how y v.2

You need to take leave from your work of over one month for personal reasons Write a letter to your boss In your letter Explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need Explain how you will keep up to date while you are away Suggest how y v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, This is John, working in the technology department of the company and I am requesting you to grant me one month of leave to look after my father post his knee replacement surgery. If possible, I would like the leave from Jan 1st, 2017 with a return date of February 1st, 2017. My father has arthritis and the doctor has recommended replacing his knees so that he will get rid of the wheelchair. After surgery, there will be 4 weeks of rehabilitation period where I have to take him to physiotherapist every day for physiotherapy sessions. While I am away from the office, I will be promptly responding to office emails and will be reading through the daily status report to keep myself updated with day’s work and project roadmap. I have requested Smith and Robin to provide coverage during my absence and planned to transition my current project responsibilities to them. Additionally, they are experienced in patching security updates on the network and maintenance of the servers. I assure you that there will be no impact to project delivery and request you to approve my one month of vacation to support my family. Thank you very much for your consideration. Yours sincerely, John
Dear Sir/Madam,

This is John, working in the technology department of the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
company and
I am requesting you to grant me one month of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
to look after my father post his knee replacement surgery. If possible, I would like the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
from Jan 1st, 2017 with a return date of February 1st, 2017.

My father has arthritis and the doctor has recommended replacing his knees
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that he will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
rid of the wheelchair. After surgery, there will be 4 weeks of rehabilitation period where I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
take him to physiotherapist every day for physiotherapy sessions.

While I am away from the office, I will be
promptly
responding to office emails and will be reading through the daily status report to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
myself updated with day’s work and project roadmap.

I have requested Smith and Robin to provide coverage during my absence and planned to transition my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
project responsibilities to them.
Additionally
, they
are experienced
in patching security updates on the network and maintenance of the servers.

I assure you that there will be no impact to project delivery and request you to approve my one month of vacation to support my family.

Thank you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much for your consideration.

Yours
sincerely
,

John
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS letter You need to take leave from your work of over one month for personal reasons Write a letter to your boss In your letter Explain the reason for the leave and the length of leave you need Explain how you will keep up to date while you are away Suggest how y v. 2

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
205 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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