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You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university Write a letter to inquire about about a course In your letter explain which course you are interested in tell what you know about the university explain why you shou v.2

You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university Write a letter to inquire about about a course In your letter explain which course you are interested in tell what you know about the university explain why you shou v. 2
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to query about professional curriculum commencing this summer at University of Chicago. Being a computer professional, I want to pursue Masters in Computers from University of Chicago. Prerequisite of this curriculum is graduation degree from one of the prestigious universities. This course is of two years in total. By browsing university website, I found that university has well trained and experienced professors for different courses. Moreover, training and placement cell has 100% campus placements last year which I think is a sign of achievement. Apart from that, campus is large with 5 auditorium, hostel accommodation for students, modern and well equipped classrooms and parking space for students' vehicles. Going through university brochure, I get to know that university also sponsor scholarship for foreign students holding exceptional academic score. I want to draw your attention on my academics and professional experience of 2 years in multinational product based company Ciena. Being a gold medalist and with consistent CGPA of 4. 5/5 in my graduation, I hope that your university will consider my name for scholarship program. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Ell
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to query about professional curriculum commencing this summer at
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University
of Chicago.

Being a computer professional, I want to pursue Masters in Computers from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
University
of Chicago. Prerequisite of this curriculum is graduation degree from one of the prestigious
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universities
. This course is of two years in total.

By browsing
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university
website, I found that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
has
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well trained
and experienced professors for
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different
courses.
Moreover
, training and placement cell has 100% campus placements last year which I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
is a
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sign
of achievement. Apart from that, campus is large with 5
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auditorium
, hostel accommodation for students, modern and
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well equipped
classrooms and parking space for
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students&
#039; vehicles.

Going through
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university
brochure, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to know that
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university
also
sponsor scholarship for foreign students holding exceptional academic score. I want to draw your attention on my academics and professional experience of 2 years in multinational product based
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
Possible spelling mistake found.
Ciena
. Being a gold medalist and with consistent CGPA of 4. 5/5 in my graduation, I hope that your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
will consider my name for scholarship program.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ell
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university Write a letter to inquire about about a course In your letter explain which course you are interested in tell what you know about the university explain why you shou v. 2

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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