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Your university lecturer gave you an assignment. You won’t be able to submit your assignment on time. v.1

Your university lecturer gave you an assignment. You won’t be able to submit your assignment on time. v. 1
Dear Mr Watson, Hope this letter finds you in good health and spirit. I understand that you feel very strongly about turning all kinds of assignments on time, but it looks like you will have to make an exception this time around. Let me please explain to you what actually has happened. About a few days ago, I, along with a few friends of mine, went to a lake to catch some fish for our upcoming weekend fish barbecue. However, the day, we went outside to catch our fish, was a little chilly, but certainly not enough to make me sick. However, as time progressed, the weather was becoming colder, but we were not exactly in a mood to care about that since we were enjoying our time in the lake while catching one fish after another. But, the next day, I started to feel a terrible fever and headache, because of spending too long in the cold. I am terribly sorry that, due to this, I couldn’t finish the assignment as yet. However, I will definitely be able to submit my assignment after three days from now, since I would feel much better by then because of taking medicine. I am hoping that you would allow me to submit my assignment three days later than the initially proposed date. Thank you in advanced. Yours sincerely, Li Xiu Ying
Dear Mr Watson,

Hope this letter finds you in
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good
health and spirit. I understand that you feel
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very
strongly
about turning all kinds of
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assignments
on
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time
,
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but
it looks like you will
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have to
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make
an exception this
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time
around.
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Let
me
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please
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explain
to you what actually has happened.

About a few days ago, I, along with a few friends of mine, went to a lake to catch
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some
fish for our upcoming weekend fish barbecue.
However
, the day, we went outside to catch our fish, was a
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little
chilly,
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but
certainly
not
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enough
to
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make
me sick.
However
, as
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time
progressed, the weather was becoming colder,
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but
we were not exactly in a mood to care about that since we were enjoying our
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time
in the lake while catching one fish after another.
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But
, the
next
day, I
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started
to feel a terrible fever and headache,
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because
of spending too long in the
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cold
. I am
terribly
sorry that, due to this, I couldn’t finish the
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assignment
as
yet
.

However
, I will definitely be able to submit my
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assignment
after three days from
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now
, since I would feel much better by then
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because
of taking medicine.

I am hoping that you would
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allow
me to submit my
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assignment
three days later than the
initially
proposed date. Thank you in
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advanced
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Li
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Xiu
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Ying
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your university lecturer gave you an assignment. You won’t be able to submit your assignment on time. v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
228 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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