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You have a pen pal and you are writing your first letter to that pen pal. In your letter, describe your previous studies and/or work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Also, tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her. v.2

You have a pen pal and you are writing your first letter to that pen pal. In your letter, describe your previous studies and/or work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Also, tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her. v. 2
Dear John, I am Raj from Delhi, India, writing to introduce myself. As a pen pal, I want to let you know more about me. I would like to thank you for your letter and it was nice knowing so many things about you. I must say, you have a great way of writing. We both share many common interests and hobbies and it is indeed a great surprise. The subjects that we had opted in for our respective college and university education were coincidentally common. As a matter of fact, it is due to this reason both of our employment sector and job responsibilities are strikingly similar. Ironically, the respective companies in which we both are employed are archrivals in the industry of Finance and Banking. I would like to update you about some of the recent events. I have lately joined yoga and meditation classes. However, I still do not miss my age-old hobby of swimming. It is hard to recollect even a single day, barring the weekly off, when I miss a dip in the swimming pool. Apart from this, my weekends are generally devoted to spending time strictly with my family. The overall credit for my health, however, goes to the one and a half session of yoga classes in the morning. Thank you for inviting me to visit your city. I will certainly try to come and meet you. Let us catch up in the coming December and till then take care and keep in touch. Warm wishes, Neeraj Mehra
Dear John,

I am Raj from Delhi, India, writing to introduce myself. As a pen pal, I want to
let
you know more about me. I would like to thank you for your letter and it was nice knowing
so
many
things about you. I
must
say, you have a great way of writing.

We both share
many
common interests and hobbies and it is
indeed
a great surprise. The subjects that we had opted in for our respective college and university education were
coincidentally
common. As a matter of fact, it is due to this reason both of our employment sector and job responsibilities are
strikingly
similar.
Ironically
, the respective
companies
in which we both
are employed
are
archrivals
in the industry of Finance and Banking.

I would like to update you about
some of the
recent
events
. I have lately
joined
yoga and meditation classes.
However
, I
still
do not miss my age-
old
hobby of swimming. It is
hard
to recollect even a single day, barring the weekly off, when I miss a dip in the swimming pool. Apart from this, my weekends are
generally
devoted to spending time
strictly
with my family. The
overall
credit for my health,
however
, goes to the one and a half session of yoga classes in the morning.

Thank you for inviting me to visit your city. I will
certainly
try to
come
and
meet
you.
Let
us catch up in the coming December and till then take care and
keep
in touch.

Warm wishes,

Neeraj
Mehra
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter You have a pen pal and you are writing your first letter to that pen pal. In your letter, describe your previous studies and/or work experience, your current activities, hobbies and interests. Also, tell your pen pal that you will be visiting him/her. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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