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Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your houseflat. v.4

Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your houseflat. v. 4
Dear Mr & Mrs Johnson, I am writing in response to your complaint letter about the noise from my apartment. I feel that I have to explain myself and humbly ask for your forgiveness. I am a student of the North Carolina Arts College and as a part of my term final, I have to perform in 4 plays and play the flute and guitar. Therefore, I have to rehearse every day because I am eager to make a good impression on my teachers. To achieve my goal, I have been practising for about 3 hours a day for the last week. I must apologise for playing in inappropriate hours. It was all my fault since I did not clearly know the rules of our apartment that prohibits playing any musical instrument loudly. However, I have consulted with my class teacher and he suggested me to use one of the college rooms to rehearse for a small fee. I assure that you will not be disturbed again by any means by the noise from my flat. I request your forgiveness. Please, accept this box of home-made cookies as a token of my appreciation for not giving this problem a legal action from your end. Yours sincerely, Mark Arther
Dear Mr & Mrs Johnson,

I am writing in response to your complaint letter about the noise from my apartment. I feel that I
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have to
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explain
myself and
humbly
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ask for
your forgiveness.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am a student of the North Carolina Arts College and as a part of my term final, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
perform in 4 plays and play the flute and guitar.
Therefore
, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
rehearse every day
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because
I am eager to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
impression on my teachers. To achieve my goal, I have been
Possible spelling mistake. 'practising' is British English.
practising
for about 3 hours a day for the last week.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
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apologise
for playing in inappropriate hours. It was all my fault since I did not
clearly
know the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
of our apartment that prohibits playing any musical instrument
loudly
.
However
, I have consulted with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
teacher and
he suggested me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
one of the college rooms to rehearse for a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
fee. I assure that you will not
be disturbed
again by any means by the noise from my flat.

I request your forgiveness.
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Please
, accept this box of home-made cookies as a token of my appreciation for not giving this problem a legal action from your
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end
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Mark
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Arther
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your houseflat. v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
207 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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