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Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your houseflat. v.2

Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your houseflat. v. 2
Dear Barbara, I am very shocked to learn from your letter that the noise from my flat has been a source of disturbance for you and it has been spoiling your evening and causing distress. I am utterly regretful for that. I had no idea that the noise would reach your flat and cause you trouble. Please accept my sincere apology and I assure you that I will be more careful from now on. As you may have guessed, I am trying to refit my kitchen in the evening when I get back from my office. Unfortunately, it is taking longer than expected and I have been having problems with getting things to fit properly. The banging and hammering must have created the cacophony and I should have been more cautious. As the kitchen work is still not finished, I have decided to call a professional after reading your letter. I will instruct him to keep the noise level as minimum as possible and the work should be done in the next two or three days. I will make sure he works only in daytime hours, so you won't be disturbed in the evening again. I am really sorry to have caused you the problem. Yours sincerely, Gorner Brek
Dear Barbara,

I am
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very
shocked to learn from your letter that the noise from my flat has been a source of disturbance for you and it has been spoiling your evening and causing distress. I am
utterly
regretful for that.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
had no
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that the noise would reach your flat and cause you trouble.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
accept my sincere apology and I assure you that I will be more careful from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
on.

As you may have guessed, I am trying to refit my kitchen in the evening when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
back from my office. Unfortunately, it is taking longer than
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
and I have been having problems with getting things to fit
properly
. The banging and hammering
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
have created the cacophony and I should have been more cautious.

As the kitchen work is
still
not finished, I have decided to call a professional after reading your letter. I will instruct him to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the noise level as minimum as possible and the work should
be done
in the
next
two or three days. I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure he works
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
in daytime hours,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
you won't
be disturbed
in the evening again.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am
really
sorry to have caused you the problem.

Yours
sincerely
,

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Gorner
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Brek
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your neighbours have recently written to you to complain about the noise from your houseflat. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
208 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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