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Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. v.4

Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. v. 4
Respected Sir/Madam, I intend to write this letter to you to seek your support. We have been shifted to this town recently. Previously we were living at Cheetham Hill town in Manchester and moved to this area due to my husband’s job posting. My son is 12 years of age and he was in standard 7 when we moved. I request you to enroll my son to your school in 7th standard. I understand that is mid-year and admissions are closed, but it would be very kind of you to accommodate. Due to our unplanned and sudden shifting, my son will suffer and his one year will be wasted. I assure you that my son will adjust in class very quickly as he is not only very good in academics but also a school athlete. He used to be a school football captain and would like to continue playing in your school as well. I have heard of your school’s reputation and positive reviews of parents and it would be honor for me if you accommodate my son. I shall be very grateful to you for this. Looking forward to your positive response. Yours faithfully, Samantha
Respected Sir/Madam,

I intend to write this letter to you to seek your support. We have
been shifted
to this town recently. Previously we were living at
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Cheetham
Hill town in Manchester and
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moved
to this area due to my husband’s job posting. My
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son
is 12 years of
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age and
he was in standard 7 when we
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moved
. I request you to enroll my
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son
to your
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school
in 7th standard. I understand
that is
mid-year and admissions
are closed
,
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but
it would be
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very
kind of you to accommodate. Due to our unplanned and sudden shifting, my
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son
will suffer and his one year will
be wasted
. I assure you that my
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son
will adjust in
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class
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very
quickly
as he is not
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only
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very
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good
in academics
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but
also
a
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school
athlete. He
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used
to be a
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school
football captain and would like to continue playing in your
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school
as well
. I have heard of your
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school’s
reputation and
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positive
reviews of parents and it would be honor for me if you accommodate my son.

I shall be
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very
grateful to you for this. Looking forward to your
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positive
response.

Yours
faithfully
,

Samantha
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. v. 4

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
195 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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