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Write a letter to your English speaking friend who is visiting you soon and asking you what presents your family would like. Write- Who your family consists ofWhat kind of presents each member would like. How you feel about v.2

Write a letter to your English speaking friend who is visiting you soon and asking you what presents your family would like. Write- Who your family consists ofWhat kind of presents each member would like. How you feel about v. 2
Dear Hannah, It was a very pleasant surprise to hear from you after such a long time. My joy knew no bounds when I read that you are coming to visit me. My parents and my younger sister too are very excited about your visit. It is very generous of you to ask what they would like as a present from you. Believe me Hannah, your presence here would be the biggest gift for them. As far as material things are concerned, nowadays everything is available in India. So, please don’t bother yourself for this. It would be great if you send me your detailed itinerary so that I can plan the best for your holiday. You know, India has a rich historical background and I would like you to visit as much as possible. There is the Taj Mahal at Agra which is a must-see. Then the Golden Temple at Amritsar, the temples of South India, the beaches of Goa and the back-waters of Kerala are all awaiting you. Fortunately, there is a summer break going on in my college, so I shall be completely at your disposal. I am really excited about your visit. We shall have a great holiday together and also revive some of the nostalgic memories of the great time we had four years ago when we were both studying at Leeds University. Waiting eagerly for you. Yours lovingly, Ajay
Dear Hannah,

It was a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
pleasant surprise to hear from you after such a long time. My joy knew no bounds when I read that you are coming to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visit
me.

My parents and my younger sister too are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
excited about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visit
. It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
generous of you to ask what they would like as a present from you. Believe me Hannah, your presence here would be the biggest gift for them. As far as material things
are concerned
, nowadays everything is available in India.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
don’t bother yourself for this.

It would be great if you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me your detailed itinerary
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can plan the best for your holiday. You know, India has a rich historical background and I would like you to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visit
as much as possible. There is the Taj Mahal at Agra which is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
. Then the Golden Temple at Amritsar, the temples of South India, the beaches of Goa and the back-waters of Kerala are all awaiting you.
Fortunately
, there is a summer break going on in my college,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I shall be completely at your disposal. I am
really
excited about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
visit
. We shall have a great holiday together and
also
revive
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
nostalgic memories of the great time we had four years ago when we were both studying at Leeds University.

Waiting
eagerly
for you.

Yours
lovingly
,

Ajay
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
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IELTS letter Write a letter to your English speaking friend who is visiting you soon and asking you what presents your family would like. Write- Who your family consists ofWhat kind of presents each member would like. How you feel about v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
234 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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