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Your company have recently used the conference facilities for a hotel but you had some problems at the conference centre. Write a letter to a hotel manager and explain: What was the problem? How did it affect you? Suggest ways of resolving this problem? v.2

Your company have recently used the conference facilities for a hotel but you had some problems at the conference centre. Write a letter to a hotel manager and explain: What was the problem? How did it affect you? Suggest ways of resolving this problem? v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that our company had booked a meeting room on 15th January 2019 evening for the monthly training session of the staff. Although, I went a day before to check all the arrangements for the smooth convention of the training and everything seemed perfect at that time. But on the day of training, the trainer faced difficulties with the audio/video system of the hotel as the microphone voice and video voice were skipping after a short interval. Even though the support staff has replaced the microphone three times but the problem didn' t resolve. Let me explain to you that the trainer and the audience experienced difficulties in communicating with each other and especially the trainer couldn' t impart the intended message. As a result, the session went in vain and we had to wrap-up for the evening. I would suggest you arrange a complete overhaul of the system to ascertain the problem and getting it resolved. Furthermore, I believe the upgrade of the audio/video system to the latest standards is essential keeping in view the modern requirements. I would hope that we would not face such issues during our next training session. Yours truly, XYZ
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to inform you that our
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company
had booked a meeting room on 15th January 2019 evening for the monthly
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training
session of the staff. Although, I went a day
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before
to
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check
all the arrangements for the smooth convention of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
and everything seemed perfect at that time.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
on the day of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
, the trainer faced difficulties with the audio/video system of the hotel as the microphone voice and video voice were skipping after a short interval.
Even though
the support staff has replaced the microphone three times
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the problem
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didn&
#039; t resolve.

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Let
me
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explain
to you that the trainer and the audience experienced difficulties in communicating with each other and
especially
the trainer
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couldn&
#039; t impart the intended message.
As a result
, the session went in
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vain and
we had to wrap-up for the evening.

I would suggest you arrange a complete overhaul of the system to ascertain the problem and getting it resolved.
Furthermore
, I believe the upgrade of the audio/video system to the latest standards is essential keeping in view the modern requirements.

I would hope that we would not face such issues during our
next
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
training
session.

Yours
truly
,

XYZ
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter Your company have recently used the conference facilities for a hotel but you had some problems at the conference centre. Write a letter to a hotel manager and explain: What was the problem? How did it affect you? Suggest ways of resolving this problem? v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
204 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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