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You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper about helping to improve the environment. Write a letter to the editor and explain - Why you are interested in it - How you can help - When you are available v.1

You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper about helping to improve the environment. Write a letter to the editor and explain - Why you are interested in it - How you can help - When you are available v. 1
Dear sir, I am Harry, a professor of computer science in Rhode island university. Yesterday I read an advertisement about helping in environment protection in your weekly publication. I am writing this letter help you voluntarily in this noble cause. As a responsible citizen of my country, I would like to put some efforts to improve its environmental conditions. Being a professor, I am a role model to many of my students. I would like to set an example that it there is a will there is a way, we all give an excuse of busy lifestyle and family responsibilities, when it comes to return something to our nature. My working hours are 9am to 5 pm in weekdays and I am free on weekends, so I can help you in the evening or during weekends. our university has around 1500 students, I will ask for donation by each member of university, thus that fund could be used for the betterment of environment. Similarly I can make power point presentations that compares today' s landscape conditions with those decades back, thus showing how we had destructed our nature. This will encourage the audience to protect the nature and revoke the destructions if possible. I will be higly obliged if you give me a chance to be part of this nature protection campaign. You can call me at 401-488-9665 for any other information. Your' s sincerely harry
Dear sir,

I am Harry, a professor of computer science in
If the term is a proper noun, use initial capitals.
Rhode island
university. Yesterday I read an advertisement about helping in environment protection in your weekly publication. I am writing this letter
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you
voluntarily
in this noble cause.

As a responsible citizen of my country, I would like to put
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some
efforts to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
its environmental conditions. Being a professor, I am a role model to
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many
of my students. I would like to set an example that it there is a will there is a way, we all give an excuse of busy lifestyle and family responsibilities, when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to return something to our nature.

My working hours are 9am to 5 pm in
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weekdays and
I am free on weekends,
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so
I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you in the evening or during weekends.
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our
university has around 1500 students, I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
donation by each member of university,
thus
that fund could be
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used
for the betterment of environment.
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Similarly
I can
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make
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power point
presentations that compares
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today&
#039; s landscape conditions with those decades back,
thus
showing how we had destructed our nature. This will encourage the audience to protect the nature and revoke the
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destructions
if possible.

I will be
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higly
obliged if you give me a chance to be part of this nature protection campaign. You can call me at 401-488-9665 for any other information.

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Your&
#039; s
sincerely


harry
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in the local newspaper about helping to improve the environment. Write a letter to the editor and explain - Why you are interested in it - How you can help - When you are available v. 1

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
235 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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