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Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the insurance amount you have to pay for your car each month. You are not happy about this. v. 2

Dear Sir or Madam, Yesterday I received a letter from your company regarding a decision to increase the monthly car insurance premium by 15% effective from next month. I, however, feel that the decision is one-sided and contradicts the interests of your customers. I am hoping that you would reconsider and keep the premium unchanged. I have been managing both my car and life insurance with your company for the last 15 years. I even updated the car insurance policy at the end of last year when I sold my old car and purchased a new one. As per my findings, I am already paying a bit higher for my car insurance and that is why a further increase in the monthly premium is unjustified. I have always paid the premium in due time and you can check that from your database. My car insurance policy number is 2510236-254/1. Since I am not willing to pay an exorbitant amount for my insurance but want to manage it with your company, I am hoping that you would reconsider your decision of raising the monthly amount. Otherwise, I would be forced to move my policy to another company. I really appreciate your time and would like to get a reply from you soon. Yours faithfully, Jonathan Stuart

IELTS letter Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the insurance amount you have to pay for your car each month. You are not happy about this. v.2

Dear Sir or Madam,

Yesterday I received a letter from your
company
regarding a decision to increase the monthly
car
insurance
premium by 15% effective from
next
month. I,
however
, feel that the decision is one-sided and contradicts the interests of your customers. I am hoping that you would reconsider and
keep
the premium unchanged.

I
have been managing both my
car
and life
insurance
with your
company
for the last 15 years.
I
even updated the
car
insurance
policy at the
end
of last year when I sold my
old
car
and
purchased
a new one. As per my findings, I am already paying a bit higher for my
car
insurance
and
that is
why a
further
increase in the monthly premium
is unjustified
. I have always paid the premium in due time and you can
check
that from your database. My
car
insurance
policy number is 2510236-254/1.

Since I am not willing to pay an exorbitant amount for my
insurance
but
want to manage it with your
company
, I am hoping that you would reconsider your decision of raising the monthly amount.
Otherwise
, I would
be forced
to
move
my policy to another
company
.

I
really
appreciate your time and would like to
get
a reply from you
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jonathan Stuart
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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Letter
7 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resources: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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