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Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the insurance amount you have to pay for your car each month. You are not happy about this. v.3

Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the insurance amount you have to pay for your car each month. You are not happy about this. v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in response to a letter that I received recently stating that my insurance premium would increase from July 2020. I do not believe the increase is rational and hence would like you to reconsider it. I have been managing my car insurance with your company for the last 8 years and my insurance policy number is 8101023457-115-2. My monthly premium is already higher than that of some of my colleagues and relatives. The 20% increase in monthly insurance payment is not acceptable because I am already paying higher and no other notable insurance company has raised their premium recently. Inflating the premium, especially at a time of recession, goes against the insurance holders' interest. I would really appreciate if you could write me back with an explanation of why such an increase is needed when others have not done so. I would request you to reconsider the decision, otherwise, I am afraid I will have to move my car insurance policy to another company. I am looking forward to receiving your reply as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Sonia Vincent
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in response to a letter that I received recently stating that my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
premium would
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
increase
from July 2020. I do not believe the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
increase
is rational and
hence
would like you to reconsider it.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have been managing my car
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
for the last 8 years and my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
policy number is 8101023457-115-2. My monthly premium is already higher than that of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
of my colleagues and relatives. The 20%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
increase
in monthly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
payment is not acceptable
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I am already paying higher and no other notable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
has raised their premium recently.

Inflating the premium,
especially
at a time of recession, goes against the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
holders' interest. I would
really
appreciate if you could write me back with an explanation of why such an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
increase
is needed
when others have not done
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
. I would request you to reconsider the decision,
otherwise
, I am afraid I will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
my car
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
policy to another
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am looking forward to receiving your reply as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible.

Yours
faithfully
,

Sonia Vincent
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
11Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the insurance amount you have to pay for your car each month. You are not happy about this. v. 3

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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