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Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the insurance amount you have to pay for your car each month. You are not happy about this. v.4

Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the insurance amount you have to pay for your car each month. You are not happy about this. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, Yesterday I received a letter from your company regarding a decision to increase the monthly car insurance premium by 15% effective from next month. I, however, feel that the decision is one-sided and contradicts the interests of your customers. I am hoping that you would reconsider and keep the premium unchanged. I have been managing both my car and life insurance with your company for the last 15 years. I even updated the car insurance policy at the end of last year when I sold my old car and purchased a new one. As per my findings, I am already paying a bit higher for my car insurance and that is why a further increase in the monthly premium is unjustified. I have always paid the premium in due time and you can check that from your database. My car insurance policy number is 2510236-254/1. Since I am not willing to pay an exorbitant amount for my insurance but want to manage it with your company, I am hoping that you would reconsider your decision of raising the monthly amount. Otherwise, I would be forced to move my policy to another company. I really appreciate your time and would like to get a reply from you soon. Yours faithfully, Jonathan Stuart
Dear Sir or Madam,

Yesterday I received a letter from your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
regarding a decision to increase the monthly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
premium by 15% effective from
next
month. I,
however
, feel that the decision is one-sided and contradicts the interests of your customers. I am hoping that you would reconsider and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the premium unchanged.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have been managing both my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
and life
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
for the last 15 years.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
even updated the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
policy at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of last year when I sold my
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
and
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purchased
a new one. As per my findings, I am already paying a bit higher for my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
and
that is
why a
further
increase in the monthly premium
is unjustified
. I have always paid the premium in due time and you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
that from your database. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
policy number is 2510236-254/1.

Since I am not willing to pay an exorbitant amount for my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
insurance
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
want to manage it with your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
, I am hoping that you would reconsider your decision of raising the monthly amount.
Otherwise
, I would
be forced
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
my policy to another
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

I
really
appreciate your time and would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a reply from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jonathan Stuart
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter Your car insurance company has told you that they are going to increase the insurance amount you have to pay for your car each month. You are not happy about this. v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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