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You work for a company and have recently decided to leave your current employment. v.2

You work for a company and have recently decided to leave your current employment. v. 2
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to inform you about my decision not to continue serving your company. After giving a lot of thought and consideration to my current situation, I have finally decided to leave your company, effective from 1st of July 2020, and pursue another course of plan and career in future. In fact, I want to work in the field of Horticulture. But, please know that I have learned about a lot of things after working at your company. Besides, each and every staff at your company has treated me like their family just as I have done with them. So, there is absolutely nothing wrong as far as your company and my current position are concerned. By the way, I want to pursue my career as a Horticulturist because my family has some substantial land property and gardens which I want to look after and possibly expand them as much as I can. It is just that for the last couple of years, I have felt really strongly about working in the field and remain close to the Mother Nature instead of getting stuck in an office environment. Thank you once again for everything you have done for me. I will be always indebted. Yours faithfully, Pema Lingpa
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you about my decision not to continue serving your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
. After giving
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a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
and consideration to my
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current
situation, I have
finally
decided to
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leave
your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
, effective from 1st of July 2020, and pursue another course of plan and career
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.

In fact, I want to work in the field of Horticulture.
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But
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
know that I have learned about
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
things after working at your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
.
Besides
, each and every staff at your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
has treated me like their family
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
as I have done with them.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
, there is
absolutely
nothing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
as far as your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
and my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
position
are concerned
.

By the way, I want to pursue my career as a Horticulturist
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
my family has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
substantial land property and gardens which I want to look after and
possibly
expand them as much as I can. It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
that for the last couple of years, I have felt
really
strongly
about working in the field and remain close to the Mother Nature
instead
of getting stuck in an office environment.

Thank you once again for everything you have done for me. I will be always indebted.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Pema
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Lingpa
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You work for a company and have recently decided to leave your current employment. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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