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You were offered to join a company but for some reasons, you can not join there. v.1

You were offered to join a company but for some reasons, you can not join there. v. 1
Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to thank you for the opportunity to join your company. Regrettably, due to the prevailing situation in my present organisation, I cannot accept the offer right now. However, I am hoping to be a part of your company some time in the future. In my present organisation, I have recently been given a chance to manage an important long-term project and I think this is the right time to portray my capabilities to the company. It not only paves over for my organisational development but also for my personal growth. In this juncture, bidding adieu to my present employer is not the right decision and I once again express my heartfelt gratitude for the belief you have on me and for giving me the offer. However, my current employer has recently requested me to carry on with them and I am grateful to them for the growth opportunity they have given me so far. I like the way this company manages big clients and a healthy work environment they offer. Please do consider my humble request and I am extremely sorry for declining the job offer. However, I would like to work with you in the coming days and I am hoping that you would consider me a potential employee sometime in the future. Yours faithfully, Prasadarao Talluri
Dear Sir or Madam,

I would like to thank you for the opportunity to
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join
your
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company
.
Regrettably
, due to the prevailing situation in my present
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organisation
, I cannot accept the offer right
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now
.
However
, I am hoping to be a part of your
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company
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some
time in the future.

In my present
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organisation
, I have recently been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
a chance to manage an
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important
long-term project and I
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think
this is the right time to portray my capabilities to the
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company
. It not
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only
paves over for my
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organisational
development
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but
also
for my personal growth. In this juncture, bidding adieu to my present employer is not the right decision and I once again express my heartfelt gratitude for the belief you have on me and for giving me the offer.
However
, my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
employer has recently requested me to carry on with
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
them and
I am grateful to them for the growth opportunity they have
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given
me
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so
far. I like the way this
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company
manages
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big
clients and a healthy work environment they offer.

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Please
do consider my humble
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request and
I am
extremely
sorry for declining the job offer.
However
, I would like to work with you in the coming
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
days and
I am hoping that you would consider me a potential employee sometime in the future.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Prasadarao
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Talluri
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter You were offered to join a company but for some reasons, you can not join there. v. 1

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
224 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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