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You have recently ordered an item through the internet, but are not happy with the purchase. write to the company. In your letter-describe what you purchasedexplain why you are not happy with the purchasetell them what you would like them to do about the si v.2

You have recently ordered an item through the internet, but are not happy with the purchase. write to the company. In your letter-describe what you purchasedexplain why you are not happy with the purchasetell them what you would like them to do about the si v. 2
I want to bring to your kind attention, that I have ordered Omni brand kids bicycle vide order number 09731548 from your website on the 21st of April with special instructions to gift wrap. This was an impulsive buy as was scrolling the browser and i got attracted to this unique design and attractive price. My point of concern is that as soon as i assembled it and gave it to my daughter for riding, the rear wheel started wobbling. Therefore, my daughter lost her balance and fell on the ground. All the excitement and fun just vanished from her face and I also feel dismayed. In addition to this, the help line number mentioned in your instructions manual was not reachable. To make sure you do not lose your valuable customer, I will strongly suggest you to replace the bicycle with an upgraded version and get it delivered in next three days. You can arrange for the pickup of this faulty bicycle by tomorrow between 4 to 6 pm. Also, make sure this manufacturing defect is highlighted to your production team and a reasonable reply should reach me on my registered email-id. your sincerely
I want to bring to your kind attention, that I have ordered
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Omni
brand kids bicycle vide order number 09731548 from your website on the 21st of April with special instructions to gift wrap. This was an impulsive
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
as was scrolling the browser and
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
attracted to this unique design and attractive price.

My point of concern is that as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
assembled it and gave it to my daughter for riding, the rear wheel
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
wobbling.
Therefore
, my daughter lost her balance and fell on the ground. All the excitement and fun
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
vanished from her face and I
also
feel dismayed.
In addition
to this, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
line number mentioned in your instructions manual was not reachable.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure you do not lose your valuable customer, I will
strongly
suggest you to replace the bicycle with an upgraded version and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
it delivered in
next
three days. You can arrange for the pickup of this faulty bicycle by tomorrow
Use "between" + "and" not "to." Try this: "between 4 and 6".
between 4 to 6
pm.
Also
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure this manufacturing defect
is highlighted
to your production team and a reasonable reply should reach me on my registered email-id.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
your
sincerely
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You have recently ordered an item through the internet, but are not happy with the purchase. write to the company. In your letter-describe what you purchasedexplain why you are not happy with the purchasetell them what you would like them to do about the si v. 2

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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