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You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shopping center has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner. In your letter•Describe what you need•Ask whether they have these items•Wha v.2

You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shopping center has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner. In your letter•Describe what you need•Ask whether they have these items•Wha v. 2
Dear Mr. /Madam. , I have heard about your shop from my friend which sells second-hand furniture and he has told me that the furniture you are selling is cheap, has a guarantee for at least 3 months, and a one-day test. As the flat I have recently rented is unfurnished, I need almost all kinds of equipment to furnish it. At first, I need a bed for my bedroom, a sofa and a 40” LED TV for my living room, and two carpets; one for my bedroom and the other one for my living room. The kitchen is equipped with main facilities; so, I do not have any intention to spend my money on it. I prefer to wait for two months to buy the rest of my needs. However, these stuff that I have mentioned above must be clean and be without any damages or scratches. Please send me word if you have these facilities or not and if you have, please send me the invoice and let me know the amount of money I have to pay. I look forward to hearing from you. Your faithfully,
Dear Mr. /Madam.
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I have heard about your shop from my friend which sells second-hand
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furniture and
he has
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told
me that the furniture you are selling is
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cheap
, has a guarantee for at least 3 months, and a one-day
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test
.

As the flat I have recently rented
is unfurnished
, I need almost all kinds of equipment to furnish it. At
first
, I need a bed for my bedroom, a sofa and a 40” LED TV for my living room, and two carpets; one for my bedroom and the other one for my living room. The kitchen
is equipped
with main facilities;
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
, I do not have any intention to spend my money on it. I prefer to wait for two months to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
the rest of my needs.
However
, these stuff that I have mentioned above
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be clean and be without any damages or scratches.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me word if you have these facilities or not and if you have,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me the invoice and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know the amount of money I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
pay.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
,
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the Opportunity Shop in the shopping center has cheap second-hand furniture. Write to the shop owner. In your letter•Describe what you need•Ask whether they have these items•Wha v. 2

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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