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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. v.54

The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.
The pie chart illustrates the means of transports, which are popular in Edmonton, while the table shows the reasons why people use their cars in this city. Overall, as can be seen from the pie graph, there are the equal figures for people using buses and taxies. Another visible trend from the table is that using the cars to commute to work is the most popular purpose of people living in this city. Looking at the details at the pie chart, it is obvious that the car is the most trendy transportation in the city, with 45% of people using it. 35% of people who said that they chose LRT to commute, compared to 15% of people who used buses and taxies. Regarding the table, the percentage of drivers in Edmonton needed to commute to work is 55%. The figure for cars which are used for a lot of business purposes and take children to school is lower, at 45% and 40% respectively. The Edmonton’s people making use of cars to go to shopping and take part in leisure activities see the same lowest proportion, at 15% of both objectives.
The pie chart illustrates the means of transports, which are popular in Edmonton, while the table
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shows
the reasons why
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people
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use
their
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cars
in this city.

Overall
, as can be
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seen
from the pie graph, there are the equal figures for
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people
using buses and
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taxies
. Another visible trend from the table is that using the
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cars
to commute to work is the most popular purpose of
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people
living in this city.

Looking at the
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details
at the pie chart, it is obvious that the
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car
is the most trendy transportation in the city, with 45% of
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people
using it. 35% of
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people
who said that they chose
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LRT
to commute, compared to 15% of
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people
who
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used
buses and
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taxies
.

Regarding the table, the percentage of drivers in Edmonton needed to commute to work is 55%. The figure for
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cars
which are
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used
for
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a lot of
business purposes and take children to school is lower, at 45% and 40%
respectively
. The Edmonton’s
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people
making
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use
of
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cars
to go to shopping and
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take part
in leisure activities
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the same lowest proportion, at 15% of both objectives.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter The diagrams below give information on transport and car use in Edmonton.

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
190 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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