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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone call in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone call in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
The bar graph compares three different types of phone calls, namely local line, national and international line, and mobiles in terms of the amount of time spent by the people in the United Kingdom over the course of 8 years. Overall, it is obvious that both local line and mobiles experienced an upward trend in the number of minutes for calling, throughout the period shown. While national and international line fluctuated but still remained the highest figures. According to the chart, mobiles were the least using telephone in the UK. In 1995, it stood at considerably under 10 billion of minutes, compared to slightly below 40 billion of national or international phone calls. The figures for mobile' s calling rose dramatically from under 10 billion to around 45 billion in 2002. Similarly, there was a considerable rise in the minute number of the national and international line with nearly 60 billion in the last year. In comparison, a fluctuation was seen in the local line' s calling minutes within 8 years. The figures grew slowly by 1999 then had a stable fall in the following years. The amount of time spent on the local line reached its peak at approximately 90 billion in 1999, which was at least 2 times higher than the others.
The bar graph compares three
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different
types of phone calls,
namely
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local
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line
,
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national
and
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international
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line
, and mobiles in terms of the amount of time spent by the
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people
in the United Kingdom over the course of 8 years.

Overall
, it is obvious that both
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local
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line
and mobiles experienced an upward trend in the number of minutes for calling, throughout the period shown. While
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national
and
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international
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line
fluctuated
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but
still
remained the highest figures.

According to the chart, mobiles were the least using telephone in the UK. In 1995, it stood at
considerably
under 10
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billion
of minutes, compared to
slightly
below 40
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billion
of
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national
or
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international
phone calls. The figures for
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mobile&
#039; s calling rose
dramatically
from under 10
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billion
to around 45
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billion
in 2002.
Similarly
, there was a considerable rise in the
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minute
number of the
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national
and
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international
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line
with
nearly
60
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billion
in the last year.

In comparison
, a fluctuation was
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seen
in the
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local
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line&
#039; s calling minutes within 8 years. The figures grew
slowly
by 1999 then had a stable fall in the following years. The amount of time spent on the
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local
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line
reached its peak at approximately 90
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billion
in 1999, which was at least 2 times higher than the others.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone call in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

Letter
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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