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You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you&#0 v.4

You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you&#0 v. 4
Respected Sir, I am writing this letter with a mixed feeling of excitement and worries at the same time. First of all, I would like to appreciate the whole plan as I was waiting for such plan which covers both health and adventure areas of a person’s interest. I am fond of hiking and traveling through mountains and this tour of yours seems best to achieve my craving of mountain expedition. Considering the duration of the plan, i. e. one week, I must have to make arrangements at my end. Just to make sure that I must not miss this opportunity, I would like you to inform me about dates of this venture. In addition to this, please share the cost of this whole endeavor so that I can manage my ends. In the end, I would like to share the point which is bothering me, i. e. my weight and breathing issue. I am a bit over weight and this thing impacts on my breathing as well. I want to know the exact length of that we will cover by walking through these mountains and the way forward as if we have to walk continuously or there will be stopovers to get your breath during the walk? Your apt response in this regard will help me in taking decision accordingly. Hope to get a positive reply soon. Yours truly, John.
Respected Sir,

I am writing this letter with a mixed feeling of excitement and worries at the same time.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I would like to appreciate the whole plan as I was waiting for such plan which covers both health and adventure areas of a person’s interest. I am fond of hiking and traveling through mountains and this tour of yours seems best to achieve my craving of mountain expedition.

Considering the duration of the plan,
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i. e.
one week, I
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must
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have to
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make
arrangements at my
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end
.
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Just
to
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make
sure that I
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must
not miss this opportunity, I would like you to inform me about dates of this venture.
In addition
to this,
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please
share the cost of this whole endeavor
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can manage my ends.

In the
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end
, I would like to share the point which is bothering me,
There should be no space here: "i.e.".
i. e.
my weight and breathing issue. I am a bit over weight and this thing impacts on my breathing
as well
. I want to know the exact length of that we will cover by walking through these mountains and the way forward as if we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
walk
continuously
or there will be stopovers to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
your breath during the walk?

Your apt response in this regard will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in taking decision
accordingly
. Hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
reply
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
truly
,

John.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS letter You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you&#0 v. 4

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
231 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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