Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

You recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you. Now you want to write to your friend about the place. v.4

You recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you. Now you want to write to your friend about the place. v. 4
Dear Rahul, Last week I went to Mysore on a fabulous trip. The local tourist centre suggested me to visit the royal palace of Tipu Sultan, the Nizam of Karnataka in the 16th century. The place was a jewel and I thoroughly enjoyed it. I would like to take you there next time. On the day of my visit, coincidently it was also the festival of Dussehra and the whole palace was lit up brightly as part of the celebration. According to a local, the electricity used up on that day to light up the palace is almost equal to the electricity used up by the city throughout the year! The interior of the palace was as amazing as the gleaming exterior. There were specimens of weapons which were used during the wars in those times, pictures painted on the canvas of the royal family, details of the wars fought by the King and many more interesting things which are important from the point of view of Indian culture and history. I wish to visit the palace again same time next year to be a part of the grand celebration and I would like to invite you to join me. I promise it would be a great experience. Warm wishes, Ripal
Dear Rahul,

Last week I went to Mysore on a fabulous trip. The local tourist
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
suggested me to visit the royal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
palace
of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Tipu
Sultan, the
Possible spelling mistake found.
Nizam
of Karnataka in the 16th century. The place was a jewel and I
thoroughly
enjoyed it. I would like to take you there
next
time.

On the day of my visit,
coincidently
it was
also
the festival of
Possible spelling mistake found.
Dussehra
and the whole
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
palace
was lit up
brightly
as part of the celebration. According to a local, the electricity
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
up on that day to light up the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
palace
is almost equal to the electricity
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
up by the city throughout the year! The interior of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
palace
was as amazing as the gleaming exterior. There were specimens of weapons which were
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
during the wars in those times, pictures painted on the canvas of the royal family,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
of the wars fought by the King and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more interesting things which are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
from the point of view of Indian culture and history.

I wish to visit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
palace
again same time
next
year to be a part of the grand celebration and I would like to invite you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
me. I promise it would be a great experience.

Warm wishes,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Ripal
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You recently visited a place that had a strong impact on you. Now you want to write to your friend about the place. v. 4

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
210 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts