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You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. -Say what the part v.3

You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. -Say what the part v. 3
Dear Sir or Madam, Our conference was held in your hotel on 25th September. I writing to inform you about some experiences our participants had in the hotel. Our guests are totally interested your conference hall and facilities such as free Wi-Fi, the free package includes papers and pens. Moreover, they liked the reception and parking spaces which was your staff polite and warm welcoming to guests. Unfortunately, many participate were unhappy about food because your colleagues served foods too late and the foods were so cold. It’s happened really dangerous for our conference and we receive many complaints about foods. In addition, some people complained about rice which was too salty for someone’s who had some disease and must to have a specific diet. In my view, should your staff serve foods at a specific time, foods are still warm. I suppose to cook rice with little salt, in that not only someone’s does not like salty food, but also some people especially elderly ones have the disease and its harmful for them. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Jack Brown
Dear Sir or Madam,

Our conference
was held
in your hotel on 25th September.
Did you mean "I'm writing", "I am writing", or "I was writing"?
I writing
to inform you about
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some
experiences our participants had in the hotel.

Our guests are
totally
interested your conference hall and facilities such as free Wi-Fi, the free package includes papers and pens.
Moreover
, they liked the reception and parking spaces which was your staff polite and warm welcoming to guests.

Unfortunately,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
participate were unhappy about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
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because
your colleagues served
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
too late and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
were
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so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
. It’s happened
really
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dangerous
for our
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
conference and
we receive
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many
complaints about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
.
In addition
,
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
complained about rice which was too salty for someone’s who had
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some
disease and
After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use "must" or "have to" here.
must to
have a specific diet.

In my view, should your staff serve
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
at a specific time,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
foods
are
still
warm. I suppose to cook rice with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
salt, in that not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
someone’s does not like salty
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
especially
elderly ones have the disease and its harmful for them.

I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Jack Brown
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS letter You recently organized an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. -Say what the part v. 3

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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