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You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. v.5

You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. v. 5
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in connection with the day-long meeting that we organised at your hotel - "The Richmond", on 28th January 2020. I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for successfully hosting us, and also express our concern about the food quality, which we expect would be better in the future. Two days ago, I took feedback from the participants who joined the meeting. Although they liked the hotel, including its facilities and the services of your affable staff, many of them complained about the food we were served. Indeed, some of the menu items that were served during the lunch were not properly cooked and we did not enjoy the taste and aroma of the food. Soup and bread were served cold and that was unexpected. The lack of western food items on the menu was surprising to some of the participants. I believe you should take steps so that all the dishes are cooked properly and served in time. I also recommend that you add some western dishes to your menu. I wish you a good day and hope that that you will consider my suggestions. Yours faithfully, Brian Marsh
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing in connection with the day-long meeting that we
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organised
at your hotel
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-
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"
The Richmond
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"
, on 28th January 2020. I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for
successfully
hosting us, and
also
express our concern about the
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food
quality, which we
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expect
would be better in the future.

Two days ago, I took feedback from the participants who
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joined
the meeting. Although they liked the hotel, including its facilities and the services of your affable staff,
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many
of them complained about the
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food
we
were served
.
Indeed
,
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some of the
menu items that
were served
during the lunch were not
properly
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cooked and
we did not enjoy the taste and aroma of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
. Soup and bread
were served
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cold
and that
was unexpected
. The lack of western
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
items on the menu was surprising to
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
participants.

I believe you should take steps
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that all the dishes
are cooked
properly
and served in time. I
also
recommend that you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
western dishes to your menu.

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I
wish you a
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good
day and hope
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that that
you will consider my suggestions.

Yours
faithfully
,

Brian Marsh
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS letter You recently organised an all-day meeting for your company, which took place in a local hotel. In their feedback, participants at the meeting said that they liked the hotel, but they were unhappy about the food that was served for lunch. v. 5

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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